PLEASE HELP!!!
Jun 23rd 2010 15:49
TOEFL
I'm studying English to prepare for TOEFL test (July 10th), but I have no native fiends so I'm trouble in writing task.
I practiced some writing essay for TOEFL test, but I can't know whether these essay are correct or not. So will you please help for me to examine my essay?
These are my essay
1.
Q. Some people believe that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, whereas others believe any benefits are outweighed by the negative impact they have had on the environment. Which position do you support and why? Give concrete examples to support your answer.
While some people states that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, I'd defenitly point out that effect of automobiles is bad rather than good. There are two reasons for this: the harmful gas and global warming.
First of all, cars emmit the harmful gas such as CO2 and CO. Recently CO2 cause acid rains in particular in Europe, and as a result forests ihave been injured. Moreover gasolines which are fuels of automobiles is made from the fossile fuel such as coal and oil and the process of making it may also needs the fire which casue CO2.
Secondly, there have being the global warming all over the world mainly because of driving a car. I think that this is the very serious problem not only the earth but also our lives. For example, the higher the global temperture is, the higher the sea level will be and as a result, some ilands will sink, of course people who live in these ilands leave their country. Moreover the global warming will do harm the agriculture. According to the recent research, the price of vegetable has been increasing for several years and this is because the
temperture has been increasing. If the global warming will last, our lives will be destoroyed some day and these effect is mainly caused of driving automobiles.
Therefore automobiles have influenced bad effect to our emvironment. For these two reasons, I believe that benefits are outweighted by the negative impact automobiles have had on the environment.
2.
Q. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Companies should hire workers for their entire lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
While some people believe that companies don't need hire employers for their whole lives, I agree that conpanies should hire woker for their entire lives. There are two reasons for this; one reason is that workers can work without stress, the other reason is that this is benefit not only for employers but also companies.
First of all, if so, workers can work without anxiety. To begin with, they can easily make their plans for their lives. For example, if they were afraid of getting fired they are not able to lend money from banks for the loan of their house, and to get married. In addition, when workers work feeling anxiety of getting fired, they cannot relax. For example my uncle is always afraid of getting fired, as a result, they got sick. Consequently if companies don't hire workers for entire their lives, the employers will be unhappy and be not able to
work with releaf.
Secondly, this policy will be good effect not only for employers but also companies. First if companies do so, the workers can get skills. For example, I
heard that the workers who have worked for Canon for 20 years have the excellent skill to create high quality camera and this is obviously benefit for Canon. Moreover the atomosphere will be good because the wokers have been
working together for a long time. For these reasons, this policy can have positive effect for the companies.
In conclusion, for these two reasons: worker's relief and benefit for company, I believe that companies should hire wokers for their entire lives.
3.
Q. Do you agree or dis agree with the following statement? We should never make judgments about a person's character based on appearance or the clothes he or she wears. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
While some people insist that we should never judge others based on appearance or clothes he or she wears, I desagree with this idea. There are two reasons. One reason is that appearance tell us a lot of things about how he
or she is, and the other reason is that judgement based on appearance or the clothes is more reliable than judgement based on any other things.
The first reason why we should make judgement about a person's character by looking at his or her appearance or clothes is that we can get much information about how he or she is from his or her appearance or clothes. According to a recent reseach, we can get more than 80% information about other's characteristic based on the figure. This means that when we make jugement count on appearance we can know how his or her characteristc
is more. Moreover the clothes express person's identity. When you grasp a lot of magazines, you can find that people think the clothes as a way to express how they are. Therefore the appearance and the clothes give us a lot of stable information.
The second reason why I insist that the judgement based on appearance
or the clothes is better than judgement based on any other things is that the farmer is more reliable than latter. To begin with, when you believe what other's statement you cannot know which they tell a lie or not. However, when you believe what they are or what clothes they wear you can. In addition, when you meet others for the first time, you are not be able to make judgement what their characteristic are. For these reasons, the judgement based on appearance or clothes is more reliable.
In conclusion, for these two reasons,appearance and the clothes he or she wears give us more and realiable things, I agree with the idea that we should make judgement about a person's characteristic based on appearance or the clothes he or she wears.
I practiced some writing essay for TOEFL test, but I can't know whether these essay are correct or not. So will you please help for me to examine my essay?
These are my essay
1.
Q. Some people believe that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, whereas others believe any benefits are outweighed by the negative impact they have had on the environment. Which position do you support and why? Give concrete examples to support your answer.
While some people states that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, I'd defenitly point out that effect of automobiles is bad rather than good. There are two reasons for this: the harmful gas and global warming.
First of all, cars emmit the harmful gas such as CO2 and CO. Recently CO2 cause acid rains in particular in Europe, and as a result forests ihave been injured. Moreover gasolines which are fuels of automobiles is made from the fossile fuel such as coal and oil and the process of making it may also needs the fire which casue CO2.
Secondly, there have being the global warming all over the world mainly because of driving a car. I think that this is the very serious problem not only the earth but also our lives. For example, the higher the global temperture is, the higher the sea level will be and as a result, some ilands will sink, of course people who live in these ilands leave their country. Moreover the global warming will do harm the agriculture. According to the recent research, the price of vegetable has been increasing for several years and this is because the
temperture has been increasing. If the global warming will last, our lives will be destoroyed some day and these effect is mainly caused of driving automobiles.
Therefore automobiles have influenced bad effect to our emvironment. For these two reasons, I believe that benefits are outweighted by the negative impact automobiles have had on the environment.
2.
Q. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Companies should hire workers for their entire lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
While some people believe that companies don't need hire employers for their whole lives, I agree that conpanies should hire woker for their entire lives. There are two reasons for this; one reason is that workers can work without stress, the other reason is that this is benefit not only for employers but also companies.
First of all, if so, workers can work without anxiety. To begin with, they can easily make their plans for their lives. For example, if they were afraid of getting fired they are not able to lend money from banks for the loan of their house, and to get married. In addition, when workers work feeling anxiety of getting fired, they cannot relax. For example my uncle is always afraid of getting fired, as a result, they got sick. Consequently if companies don't hire workers for entire their lives, the employers will be unhappy and be not able to
work with releaf.
Secondly, this policy will be good effect not only for employers but also companies. First if companies do so, the workers can get skills. For example, I
heard that the workers who have worked for Canon for 20 years have the excellent skill to create high quality camera and this is obviously benefit for Canon. Moreover the atomosphere will be good because the wokers have been
working together for a long time. For these reasons, this policy can have positive effect for the companies.
In conclusion, for these two reasons: worker's relief and benefit for company, I believe that companies should hire wokers for their entire lives.
3.
Q. Do you agree or dis agree with the following statement? We should never make judgments about a person's character based on appearance or the clothes he or she wears. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
While some people insist that we should never judge others based on appearance or clothes he or she wears, I desagree with this idea. There are two reasons. One reason is that appearance tell us a lot of things about how he
or she is, and the other reason is that judgement based on appearance or the clothes is more reliable than judgement based on any other things.
The first reason why we should make judgement about a person's character by looking at his or her appearance or clothes is that we can get much information about how he or she is from his or her appearance or clothes. According to a recent reseach, we can get more than 80% information about other's characteristic based on the figure. This means that when we make jugement count on appearance we can know how his or her characteristc
is more. Moreover the clothes express person's identity. When you grasp a lot of magazines, you can find that people think the clothes as a way to express how they are. Therefore the appearance and the clothes give us a lot of stable information.
The second reason why I insist that the judgement based on appearance
or the clothes is better than judgement based on any other things is that the farmer is more reliable than latter. To begin with, when you believe what other's statement you cannot know which they tell a lie or not. However, when you believe what they are or what clothes they wear you can. In addition, when you meet others for the first time, you are not be able to make judgement what their characteristic are. For these reasons, the judgement based on appearance or clothes is more reliable.
In conclusion, for these two reasons,appearance and the clothes he or she wears give us more and realiable things, I agree with the idea that we should make judgement about a person's characteristic based on appearance or the clothes he or she wears.
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I'm studying English to prepare for TOEFL test (July 10th), but I have no native friends so I'm trouble with the writing task.
I practiced writing some writing essays for the TOEFL test, but I can't tell whether these essays are correct or not.
So will you please help for me to examine my essays?
These are my essays
While some people state that automobiles have been a beneficial invention, I'd definitely point out that the effect of automobiles is bad rather than good.
There are two reasons for this: the harmful gas and global warming.
First of all, cars emit the harmful gases such as CO2 and CO.
Recently, CO2 has caused acid rain, in particular in Europe, and as a result forests have been harmed. ("Injured" is only for people and animals.)
Moreover, gasoline, which is fuel for automobiles, is made from the fossil fuels such as coal and oil, and the process of making it may also need the fire, which causes CO2.
Secondly, there has been global warming all over the world, mainly because of driving a cars.
I think that this is a very serious problem, not only for the earth but also for our lives.
For example, the higher the global temperature is, the higher the sea level will be and as a result, some islands will sink. Of course people who live on these islands will have to leave their country.
Moreover, the global warming will do harm to agriculture.
According to the recent research, the price of vegetables has been increasing for several years, and this is because the
temperature has been increasing.
If the global warming will lasts, our lives will be destroyed some day, and these effects are mainly caused by driving automobiles.
Therefore, automobiles have badly influenced our environment.
While some people insist that we should never judge others based on appearance or the clothes he or she wears, I disagree with this idea.
One reason is that appearance tells us a lot of things about how he
or she is, and the other reason is that judgement based on appearance or clothing is more reliable than judgement based on any other things.
The first reason why we should make judgements about a person's character by looking at his or her appearance or clothes is that we can get much information about how he or she is from his or her appearance or clothes.
According to a recent research, we can get more than 80% of information about other's characteristics based on looks.
This means that when we make judgement counts on appearance, we can know how his or her characteristics
is more.
Moreover, the clothes express a person's identity.
When you look at a lot of magazines, you can find that people think of clothes as a way to express how they are.
Therefore, the appearance and clothing give us a lot of useful information.
The second reason why I insist that the judgement based on appearance
or the clothing is better than judgement based on any other things is that the former is more reliable than latter.
To begin with, when you believe what other's statements, you cannot know whether they are telling a lie or not.
However, when you know who they are or what clothes they wear you can.
In addition, when you meet others for the first time, you are not be able to make judgements as to what their characteristics are.
For these reasons, the judgement based on appearance or clothes is more reliable.
In conclusion, for these two reasons (appearance and the clothes he or she wears give us more and reliable information), I agree with the idea that we should make judgements about a person's characteristics based on appearance or the clothes he or she wears.