To present abstract thinkings in English

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In Japan we are forced to do like others from we are born.

In erementary school, we are taught to protect conformity with people in our class.

For example, when athletic meet is held, we are forced to march on like soldiers in north korean.



And if you make a mistake in such situation, you are scold by teachers.

Not just in school, but also amang your friends , when we go to 'KARAOKE' you must sing songs your friends know.

If you sing metal songs , you are looked coldly at by your friends.

So if you were in Japan , you should take care of conformity with others.

Feb 02nd 2010 11:03

  • In Japan we are forced to do like others from we are born.
  • In Japan we are forced to be like others from when we are born.

 

  • In erementary school, we are taught to protect conformity with people in our class.
  • In elementary school, we are taught to conform with people in our class.

 

  • For example, when athletic meet is held, we are forced to march on like soldiers in north korean.
  • For example, when an athletic meet is held, we are forced to march on like soldiers in north korean.

 

  • And if you make a mistake in such situation, you are scold by teachers.
  • And if you make a mistake in such a situation, you are scolded by teachers.

 

  • Not just in school, but also amang your friends , when we go to 'KARAOKE' you must sing songs your friends know.
  • Not just in school, but also amongst your friends , when we go to 'KARAOKE' you must sing songs your friends know.

 

  • So if you were in Japan , you should take care of conformity with others.
  • So if you were in Japan , you should make sure to conform with others.

 
Feb 03rd 2010 13:10 koyaken

Oh, thank you for correcting!!
Feb 08th 2010 01:19 Alycia

That's kind of sad that you can't be who you really are, even with your friends. I'm sorry :(
Feb 08th 2010 09:44 Wintour

  • To present abstract thinkings in English
  • Presenting Abstract Thoughts in English

 

  • In erementary school, we are taught to protect conformity with people in our class.
  • In elementary school, we are taught to protect conformity amongst the people in our class.

 

  • Not just in school, but also amang your friends , when we go to 'KARAOKE' you must sing songs your friends know.
  • Conformity is not just practiced in school, it also practiced amongst friends. In public, it is expected that we sing songs that our friends know when we go to karaoke.

 

  • If you sing metal songs , you are looked coldly at by your friends.
  • If you sing metal songs , you are looked upon coldly by your friends.

 

  • So if you were in Japan , you should take care of conformity with others.
  • So if you are in Japan , you should take care to conform with others.

 
I think my corrections are better
koyaken
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