my cat

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Feb 09th 2010 07:58

Let me introduce my cat today.
This is my cat(see attached photoes) and her name is "Okocha".
She was named by my brother.
According to him, Okocha is a proffesional football player's name.
He is crazy about football!
He belongs an amateur futsal team.

Oh, dear!
I want to introduce my cat today, not my brother.

I love Okocha, but I can see her about 3 times in a year.
Because she lives at my parent's home in my home town.
On the other hand, I live alone in Tokyo.
Actually, I forgot her age.
She bred kitties a few years ago, so I think she is not so young.
She loves sleeping.
When I look at her, she is always sleeping.

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Feb 09th 2010 08:02 Babyrat

English
Japanese

I love Okocha, but I can see her about 3 times in a year.
I love Okocha, but I can see her only around about 3 times in a year.

Because she lives at my parent's home in my home town.
Because she lives at my parent's home in at my hometown.

She bred kitties a few years ago, so I think she is not so young.
She bred had kittens a few years ago, so I think she is not so young.

Impressive English skills, all my corrections were either small mistakes or just making the sentence flow better.

Feb 09th 2010 08:03 Babyrat

English
Japanese

I love Okocha, but I can see her about 3 times in a year.
I love Okocha, but I can only see her around 3 times in a year.

Feb 09th 2010 08:13 saez

English
French , Spanish

This is my cat(see attached photoes) and her name is "Okocha".
This is my cat (see attached photos). Her name is "Okocha".

She was named by my brother.
My brother named her.

According to him, Okocha is a proffesional football player's name.
According to him Okocha is a professional football player's name.

He belongs an amateur futsal team.
He belongs an amateur football team.

I love Okocha, but I can see her about 3 times in a year.
I love Okocha, but I can only see her about three times a year.

Because she lives at my parent's home in my home town.
Because she lives at my parent's home in my hometown.

She bred kitties a few years ago, so I think she is not so young.
She bred kittens a few years ago, so I don't think she is that young.

Very good! I would consider making these two sentences into one:
"I love Okocha, but I can see her about 3 times in a year.", "Because she lives at my parent's home in my home town."
It should read: "I love Okocha, but see her only about three times a year because she lives at my parent's home in my hometown."
The word "kitties" is a bit informal. I corrected it with "kittens" the proper term for a baby cat.
Keep up your studies! You're doing very well! がんばってね

Feb 09th 2010 12:46

How cute!

Feb 09th 2010 20:25 iruka

Japanese
English

To:Babyrat

Thank you for correcting my English and the comments!
I appreciate you :-).

To:seas

Thank you for correcting my English and the comments!
I see your advice!

To:Steph

Thank you for your comment!
Do you have any pets?