The first day of Spring Festival

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Usually,the first day of Spring Festival is very bustling . But it seems to be very dull.I can't feel the atmosphere of new year.When I walked outside ,I seldom saw one person.It is quite rare.It should be very alive.If it doesn't snow ,I think I will play in the street at this time.Today we can relax ourselves.But tomorrow we will go out to make new year calls to our relatives. However ,some families don't need to go out such as mine. Because our relatives lived nearby.We live in the south of China.When it snows ,it often follows rain.It make us cold and wet.I don't like the feeling of humidity.It is very uncomfortable.Several days ago I fall off from my bike.Fortunately ,I did't hurt myself.I still remember the ridiculous sence.Many people looked at me amazing.So I don't want to go out .Just now my friend sent me a message that she invited me to KTV.I think I will spend the whole day playing the computer.
Feb 14th 2010 15:38 Mad Man

  • Usually,the first day of Spring Festival is very bustling .
  • Usually,the first day of Spring Festival is very lively.

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  • I can't feel the atmosphere of new year.
  • I can't feel the new year atmosphere.

 

  • When I walked outside ,I seldom saw one person.
  • When I went outside, I seldom saw anyone.

 

  • Today we can relax ourselves.
  • Today we can relax,

 

  • But tomorrow we will go out to make new year calls to our relatives.
  • but tomorrow we will go out to make new year calls to our relatives.

 

  • However ,some families don't need to go out such as mine.
  • However, some families such as mine don't need to go out,

 

  • Because our relatives lived nearby.
  • because our relatives live nearby.

 

  • Several days ago I fall off from my bike.
  • Several days ago I fell off my bike.

 

  • Many people looked at me amazing.
  • Many people looked at me amazed.

 

  • Just now my friend sent me a message that she invited me to KTV.
  • Just now my friend sent me a message inviting me to KTV.

 
Your English is good XD
The major problem I can see is your punctuation, but I've seen worse :)
Feb 14th 2010 21:27 beanie.bop

  • Usually,the first day of Spring Festival is very bustling .
  • Usually, the first day of Spring Festival is very bustling with activity.

 

  • We live in the south of China.
  • We live in the southern part of China.

 

  • I think I will spend the whole day playing the computer.
  • I think I will spend the whole day playing on the computer.

 
Mad Man took care of the corrections...

I'm really sorry about the festival!!! You seemed so excited about it earlier, so I hope it picks up later on. Don't mind the people who were gawking when you fell off your bike either...I fall all the time and then laugh it off haha
Feb 15th 2010 13:05 まなみ

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