On the beach.

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Let's go to the beach because it's hot day, my husband said suddenly.
(暑いしビーチに行こう!と突然ダンナが言い出した)

Time was 2:00pm.
(その時午後2時)

We went to the beach though I thought it was too late.
(遅すぎるんじゃ…と思ったが行くことにした)

It was 3:30pm when we arrived.
(着いたら3時半)

The beach wasn't crowded though there were many people.
(人はけっこういたけど、そんなに混んでなかった)

I didn't swim, took a walk.
(私は泳がずに散歩)

Because I didn't want to show my flabby body.
(たるんだ体を見せたくなかったから…)

When I was thinking about that, I noticed there were Caucasian women who had put on the bikini.
(そんなことを考えていると、ビキニを着た白人女性がいることに気付いた)

Although they didn't have firm body in the least, they seemed to not worry about it.
(彼女らは決して引き締まった体ではなかったけど、気にしている様子でもなかった)

I think that almost all Japanese women including me feel uneasy too much about what others think.
(私を含めたほとんどの日本人女性は、他人からどう思われるか気にしすぎていると思う)

There's no need to worry about it because others don't look at us as we think.
(自分で思ってるほど他人は私たちを見てないから、気にする必要はない)

Though, I should take some exercise.
(とは言え、何か運動しないとね)
Jul 25th 2010 04:04 DavidMetcalfe

  • Let's go to the beach because it's hot day, my husband said suddenly.
  • 'Let's go to the beach because it's hot day,' my husband said suddenly.

 

  • We went to the beach though I thought it was too late.
  • We went to the beach, though I thought it was too late.

 

  • The beach wasn't crowded though there were many people.
  • The beach wasn't crowded, though there were many people.

 

  • I didn't swim, took a walk.
  • I didn't swim, but took a walk instead.

 

  • Though, I should take some exercise.
  • Though, I should exercise more.

 
Excessive use of 'though'. You could use some work on placement of commas to avoid run-ons. It's difficult to tell if the choice of sentences was simply in breaking up the Japanese in parenthesis...but some appear fragmented because of it. Example: "I didn't swim, took a walk" and "Because I didn't want to show my flabby body." This is better presented as: "I didn't swim, but took a walk because I didn't want to show my flabby body."
Jul 25th 2010 04:47 王っさん

  • There's no need to worry about it because others don't look at us as we think.
  • There's no need to worry about it because others don't look at us as much as we think.

 
I never understood the idea of going to the beach. If it's hot, the last thing I want to do is take off my clothes and sit in the sun. I would much rather go climb Mt. Fuji where it's cold.
Jul 25th 2010 05:52

  • Let's go to the beach because it's hot day, my husband said suddenly.
  • "Let's go to the beach because it's hot day," my husband said suddenly.

 

  • Time was 2:00pm.
  • The time was 2:00pm.

 

  • We went to the beach though I thought it was too late.
  • We went to the beach, even though I thought it was too late.

 

  • I didn't swim, took a walk.
  • I didn't want to swim, because I didn't want to show my flabby body,so I took a walk.

 

  • Because I didn't want to show my flabby body.
  • Because I didn't want to show my flabby body.

 

  • When I was thinking about that, I noticed there were Caucasian women who had put on the bikini.
  • While I was thinking about that, I noticed there were Caucasian women who had on their bikini.

 

  • Although they didn't have firm body in the least, they seemed to not worry about it.
  • Although they didn't have a firm body in the least, they seemed to not worry about it.

 

  • I think that almost all Japanese women including me feel uneasy too much about what others think.
  • I think that almost all Japanese women, including myself, feel very uneasy about what others think.

 

  • Though, I should take some exercise.
  • Though, I should do some exercise.

 
I hope you at least fun at the beach.

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