could anyone help me check this please ~
Jun 24th 2010 17:13
School's been really busy for me> <
hmm , the thing is I have to do a project and now I've written
lyrics in English... I have a feeling that it sounds weird somewhere
A melo
The sun so big and bright is
lighting up our hill sides.
gentle breezes blow
warm winds circle round
sweetened dream
B melo
Faraway in place and time where
the whole world could be seen
only through your eyes
and I can show you how it looks, through mine
SABI
Flowers' re proud of their petals
vivid bright in colours
Mr. cloud is forming himself into
various kinds of laughter
A melo2
The moon so big and bright is
lighting up our hill sides
and with a little help
from your tiny hands
keeping me warm
B melo
Faraway in place and time where
the whole world could be seen
only through your eyes
and I can show you how it looks, through mine
SABI
Flowers' re proud of their petals
vivid bright in colours
Mr. cloud is forming himself into
various kinds of laughter
thanks load!
hmm , the thing is I have to do a project and now I've written
lyrics in English... I have a feeling that it sounds weird somewhere
A melo
The sun so big and bright is
lighting up our hill sides.
gentle breezes blow
warm winds circle round
sweetened dream
B melo
Faraway in place and time where
the whole world could be seen
only through your eyes
and I can show you how it looks, through mine
SABI
Flowers' re proud of their petals
vivid bright in colours
Mr. cloud is forming himself into
various kinds of laughter
A melo2
The moon so big and bright is
lighting up our hill sides
and with a little help
from your tiny hands
keeping me warm
B melo
Faraway in place and time where
the whole world could be seen
only through your eyes
and I can show you how it looks, through mine
SABI
Flowers' re proud of their petals
vivid bright in colours
Mr. cloud is forming himself into
various kinds of laughter
thanks load!
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A melo Comment: I'm not sure what this means
The sun, so big and bright, is Comment: I moved "is" to end this line at the end of a clause.
is lighting up our hillsides.
sweetened dreams
Faraway, in place and time, where
where the whole world could be seen
Flowers' re proud of their petals
The moon, so big and bright, is
is lighting up our hill sides
Faraway, in place and time, where
where the whole world could be seen
thanks loads!
In the US, we call this kind of modification "Artistic License."
I'm using it for the group project.