Hello,this is my first writing@lang-8

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Today,when i login the facebook,i find a website which different people from the world use their second language to write blog,and im so amazing,i think that we can help each other about our writing!haaha~
Im so glad to here,and finding someone as my friends;)

And,i have a bit nervous,beccause tomorrow i will get my ielts socre,i am afraid that i cant achieve whatever i want.....bless me!

Recently,im crazy about shopping,i have bought lots of clothes,but i want have more and mors,is it shopholic(shoppholic?i dont know,give me an correct answer,thanks),haha!so terrible!

okie,its time to go to bed,nite!
This is my first writing on the internet,so happy!Hope i can persist doing it everyday!=]
Mar 19th 2010 00:55 Lightning

  • Hello,this is my first writing@lang-8
  • Hello, this is my first entry@lang-8

 

  • Today,when i login the facebook,i find a website which different people from the world use their second language to write blog,and im so amazing,i think that we can help each other about our writing!haaha~
  • Today, when I logged into the facebook, I found a website where different people from all over the world use their second language to write a blog ((alternative way of saying this: "where different people from all over the world write a blog entry in their second language")) and I'm so amazed, I think that we can help each other and give eachother advice about our enteries! haaha~ ((Since you were talking about a past event, you should use past tense.))

 

  • Im so glad to here,and finding someone as my friends;)
  • I'm so glad to be here, and finding someone as my (new) friends. ;) (("new" is just a suggestion, makes it sound a lot more natural.))

 

  • And,i have a bit nervous,beccause tomorrow i will get my ielts socre,i am afraid that i cant achieve whatever i want.....
  • And, I am have a bit nervous, beccause tomorrow I will get my IELTS score, I am afraid that I can't achieve whatever I want... ((or "I am afraid that I won't be able to achieve the grade/score I want."))

 

  • bless me!
  • bless me! ((In England, we don't usually say "Bless me!". You could say something like, "Woe is me!" or "Poor me!". "Poor me!" is a lot more common though.))

 

  • Recently,im crazy about shopping,i have bought lots of clothes,but i want have more and mors,is it shopholic(shoppholic?i dont know,give me an correct answer,thanks),haha!so terrible!
  • Recently, I've became crazy about shopping, I have bought lots of clothes, but I want to have more and more. Am I a is it shopholic(shopaholic? I don't know, please tell me thegive me an correct answer, thanks), haha! So terrible!

 

  • okie,its time to go to bed,nite!
  • okie, its time to go to bed, nite! (("nite" is fine, but it's non-standard spelling.))

 

  • This is my first writing on the internet,so happy!Hope i can persist doing it everyday!=]
  • This is my first time writing in English on the internet, so (I'm) happy! Hope I can keep this up persist doing it everyday! =]

 
不错啊!

Remember to make your "i"s capitals, and remember to put a space after a comma. :) Apart from that, it was understandable. I added words and changed the order of some sentences to make it flow and sound a lot more natural. ^^

加油!
Mar 19th 2010 01:12 RIFANG

Thank you !
And,I will try my best do it everyday!
RIFANG
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