Opinion essay

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Oct 19th 2009 03:09

Most people would agree that the Education is the base for a citizen's construction, but some of them will argue saying that the education society gives it to us it has as aim to teach us to stop thinking because they only need we learn to become adults who can follow commands.

The State is kind of scare that we learn to much things because knowledge allows to realize when something is unfair and make people strikes when a bad policy appears.

I really envy the system education of netherlands and the scandinavian's countries. In all these places the students can learn many languages, even in public schools, they also have extra scholar activities like sports, music and arts that help to develop others student's skills.

Spanish's system education has been obtaining poor results since long time ago. The main reasons of this, from my point of view is the lack of initiative and the plain scholar's curriculum which doesn't encouraged nobody to study. All children should have the opportunity to develope their interest and skills; the parents play and important role in all this, if they don't keep their children's motivation I am pretty sure this lack of support would be reflexed in the academic's results.

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Oct 19th 2009 12:47 Ashley [アシュリー]

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Most people would agree that the Education is the base for a citizen's construction, but some of them will argue saying that the education society gives it to us it has as aim to teach us to stop thinking because they only need we learn to become adults who can follow commands.
Most people would agree that the Education is the basis for a citizen's development, but some of them will argue saying that the education society provides has as aims to teach us to stop thinking for ourselves because it only needs we learn to become adults who can follow commands.

The State is kind of scare that we learn to much things because knowledge allows to realize when something is unfair and make people strikes when a bad policy appears.
The State may be afraid that its citizens will learn too much things because knowledge allows people to realize when something is unfair and make people protest when a bad policy appears.

I really envy the system education of netherlands and the scandinavian's countries.
I really envy the education system of the Netherlands and the Scandinavian countries.

In all these places the students can learn many languages, even in public schools, they also have extra scholar activities like sports, music and arts that help to develop others student's skills.
In all these places the students can learn many languages, even in public schools. They also have extra curricular activities like sports, music and arts that help to develop a student's other skills.

Spanish's system education has been obtaining poor results since long time ago.
The Spanish educational system has been producing poor results since long time ago.

The main reasons of this, from my point of view is the lack of initiative and the plain scholar's curriculum which doesn't encouraged nobody to study.
The main reasons for this, from my point of view, is the lack of initiative and the plain scholar's curriculum that doesn't encouraged nobody to study.

All children should have the opportunity to develope their interest and skills; the parents play and important role in all this, if they don't keep their children's motivation I am pretty sure this lack of support would be reflexed in the academic's results.
All children should have the opportunity to develope their interest and skills. (Semicolon does not work here. The two clauses are not closely related enough. You should make it two sentences. ^^) Parents play and important role in all this; if they don't stimulate their children's motivation, I am pretty sure (Since it is an opinion essay, the reader already knows that it is from your point of view) this lack of support would be reflecteded in the child's academic's results.