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11/1 English conversation school

PUBLIC_FLAG_#{@journal.pf_int} RSS feed of irori's latest journal entries Nov 02nd 2008 11:14
I am writing a sentence which I made mistake in the class.

(1)I am angry because a oil price become raise.
->The price of oil make me angry.

I noted useful writing.

(Q1)What makes you happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated)?
(A1)My family make me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
(Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase your expressive power.
Nov 02nd 2008 11:19 JapanPlz

  • I am writing a sentence which I made mistake in the class.
  • I am writing a sentence which that I made mistake in in the class.
Comment  

  • (1)I am angry because a oil price become raise.
  • (1)I am angry because a oil prices become raise went up.
Comment  

  • ->The price of oil make me angry.
  • ->The price of oil makes me angry.
Comment  

  • I noted useful writing.
  • I noted some useful things.
Comment  

  • (A1)My family make me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
  • (A1)My family makes me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
Comment  

  • (Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase your expressive power.
  • (Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase your expressive power.
Comment  
Good job.
Nov 02nd 2008 11:25 Yugi

  • I am writing a sentence which I made mistake in the class.
  • I am writing a sentence which I made mistake in the my English class.
Comment  

  • (1)I am angry because a oil price become raise.
  • (1)I am angry because a the price of oil price become raise is rising.
Comment  

  • ->The price of oil make me angry.
  • ->The price of oil makes me angry.
Comment  

  • (A1)My family make me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
  • (A1)My family makes me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
Comment  
Nov 02nd 2008 14:33 Kayne Terajima-Rii

  • I am writing a sentence which I made mistake in the class.
  • I am writing a sentence here which I made a mistake creating in my English class.
Comment  

  • (1)I am angry because a oil price become raise.
  • (1)I am angry because a oil prices are increasingly being raised.
Comment  

  • I noted useful writing.
  • I made note of some useful writing tips.
Comment  

  • (Q1)What makes you happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated)?
  • (Q1)What makes you happy (sad, angry, surprised, unhappy, bored, frustrated, etc)?
Comment  

  • (A1)My family make me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
  • (A1)My family makes me happy (sad, angry, surprised, unhappy, bored, frustrated, etc).
Comment  

  • (Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase your expressive power.
  • (Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase or decrease your expressive power.
Comment  
hope this helps

red = changes or fixing words
blue = new or changed words
Nov 02nd 2008 20:45 Makoto

  • I am writing a sentence which I made mistake in the class.
  • I am writing a sentence here, for which I made mistake in the class.
Comment  

  • (1)I am angry because a oil price become raise.
  • (1)I am angry because a oil prices become raise. have risen.
Comment  

  • ->The price of oil make me angry.
  • ->The price of oil makes me angry.
Comment  

  • I noted useful writing.
  • I noted down some useful writing tips.
Comment  

  • (Q1)What makes you happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated)?
  • (Q1)What makes you happy, sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated, etc?
Comment  

  • (A1)My family make me happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
  • (A1)My family makes me feel all of the above. happy(sad, angry, surprise unhappy, bored, frastrated).
Comment  

  • (Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase your expressive power.
  • (Tips) If you change the word "happy" in the "Q1 sentence", you increase your expressive power. If you replace the word "happy" in Q1, the sentence will become more expressive. 
Comment  
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