The Elephant Man
Jan 01st 2010 19:50
There was a creatre in a shop of London. He had a ugly face like elephants and his body had many enormous bags.
One day, a doctor saw him and he thought the elephant man was very interesting. So the doctor took the elephant man to the Hospital for check usually.
But someday the elephant man was gone suddenly. Two years later, a policeman brought him to the doctor. Formerly the elephant man was abandoned by the shopkeeper a year ago. At that monent, he had nothing and people who saw him were afraid of him. The policeman found the doctor’s card in the elephant man’s pocket. So the policeman took him to London. The doctor told these to the Hospital chairman. Then the chairman wrote a letter to the editor of The Times newspaper. After that, the readers who knew this thing from newspapers gave the Hospital 50,000 pounds for the elephant man. He could live in the Hospital for all his life.
During the life in the hospital, many people visited him including the Queen of England. They were all very kind. In addition, the elephant man had watched a play in the theatre and had a good time in the country within help from his friend.
In April 1890, the elephant man dead in bed by accident. He had a happy time in the afternoon of his life.
One day, a doctor saw him and he thought the elephant man was very interesting. So the doctor took the elephant man to the Hospital for check usually.
But someday the elephant man was gone suddenly. Two years later, a policeman brought him to the doctor. Formerly the elephant man was abandoned by the shopkeeper a year ago. At that monent, he had nothing and people who saw him were afraid of him. The policeman found the doctor’s card in the elephant man’s pocket. So the policeman took him to London. The doctor told these to the Hospital chairman. Then the chairman wrote a letter to the editor of The Times newspaper. After that, the readers who knew this thing from newspapers gave the Hospital 50,000 pounds for the elephant man. He could live in the Hospital for all his life.
During the life in the hospital, many people visited him including the Queen of England. They were all very kind. In addition, the elephant man had watched a play in the theatre and had a good time in the country within help from his friend.
In April 1890, the elephant man dead in bed by accident. He had a happy time in the afternoon of his life.
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There was a creature in a shop in London.
He had a ugly face that looked like an Elephant and his body had many enormous bags. (Bags? I'm not sure what you're trying to say, maybe he was carrying enormous bags?)
So the doctor took the elephant man to the Hospital for a routine check-up.
But one day, the elephant man suddenly went missing.
Two years later, a policeman found the elephant man and brought him to the doctor.
Previously, the elephant man was abandoned by a shopkeeper a year ago.
At that moment, he had nothing left and people who saw him were afraid of him.
The doctor reported this to the chairman of the Hospital.
Then the chairman wrote a letter to the editor of The Times newspaper.
After that, the readers who recognized the elephant man from the newspapers donated £50,000 to the Hospital for the elephant man.
He could now live in the Hospital for the rest of his life.
During his life in the hospital, many people visited him including the Queen of England.
In addition, the elephant man had watched a play in a theatre and enjoyed his time in the country with the help from his friends.
In April 1890, the elephant man died in his bed by accident.(I think you mean he died due to old age, if he died by accident that means something unexpectedly caused his death. It might be better to just rephrase this whole sentence and say: "In April 1890, the elephant man passed away in his bed")
He had the happiest time of his life.
Your English looks pretty good. This story looks a bit random though :p