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Jun 09th 2010 01:55
This is my first diary in Lang-8!
I'm nervous a little;-(

***

I am a student of an art school, in Japan.
(If you didn't know that, please read my profile:-))

As a assignment, we made a book to introduce ourselves to other people, lately.
I got a phone call by our assistant.
She said,"We're thinking to introduce your book at a site of school,so make(edit?) a sentence about concept of your book and a process till Thursday."

That news made me so happy, but to make simple sentence is not easy, I think.
I have no idea what should I write．．．．

Anyhow, I'm full of making sentence.
Ms.assistant will check it,so I write what did I think, honestly.
I'll do my best!

***

What a strange sentence this is;-(

I noticed, I an a genius of making miss spelling!;-(

I want to make more sensible sentence in English.
Roochia
Jun 09th 2010 23:37
  • I'm nervous a little;-(

  • I'm a little nervous ;-(

 
  • As a assignment, we made a book to introduce ourselves to other people, lately.

  • As an assignment, we've been making a book to introduce ourselves to other people, lately.

 
  • I got a phone call by our assistant.

  • I got a phone call from our assistant.

 
  • She said,"We're thinking to introduce your book at a site of school,so make(edit?) a sentence about concept of your book and a process till Thursday."

  • She said,"We're thinking of introducing your book at a site of school,so think ofa sentence about the concept of your book and a process till Thursday."

 
  • That news made me so happy, but to make simple sentence is not easy, I think.

  • That news made me so happy, but to create a simple sentence is not easy, I think.

 
  • I have no idea what should I write．．．．

  • I have no idea what I should write．．．．

 
  • Anyhow, I'm full of making sentence.

  • Anyhow, I'm full of making sentence.

 
  • assistant will check it,so I write what did I think, honestly.

  • assistant will check it,so I just write what I think, honestly.

 
  • I noticed, I an a genius of making miss spelling!;-(

  • I noticed, I am a genius of making spelling mistakes!;-(

 
  • I want to make more sensible sentence in English.

  • I want to make more sensible sentences in English.

 
Congrats on your first entry :) It's not bad really but there were a few places where I couldn't make out what you meant, such as 'a site of school' , 'make a process' and 'full of' so I didn't correct those. I'm also not sure whether you've already finished making thisbook or not, but I corrected the tence into present perfect, which would mean you are still in the process of making it, because you wrote 'lately'. I also changed 'to make a sentence' to 'create' or 'think of' because I think you mean more of a creative process and'make a sentence' has more to do with grammar or something and not a creative phrase.
Well these are my comments and I would love to hear some more about what kind of book you are making ;)
Good luck
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