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PUBLIC_FLAG_#{@journal.pf_int} RSS feed of bleulavande's latest journal entries Jan 29th 2009 03:54
today i met this korean woman i spoke with on the phone
we had a rendez-vous in the afternoon, so i decided to go with alicia on a pic nic on the way . alicia was very happy to play with the snow.
at 2pm we went to the rendez-vous place
i was so grateful to this woman to give me some of her time, as i am also very grateful to all the people who take time to correct my messages.
we spoke during 2 hours : culture, education, history, music a lot of topics and the time passed so quickly..we had some moments full of emotion .
she will go in korea for a month to visit her family that she has not seen for almost 3 years.
she was very happy to speak about her country, and she want me to speak with her, so when she will be back, we will talk on the phone.

i'm very happy ^^
Jan 29th 2009 04:16 JapanPlz
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  • Japanese, Spanish

  • today i met this korean woman i spoke with on the phone
  • Today I met this korean woman I spoke with on the phone.
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  • we had a rendez-vous in the afternoon, so i decided to go with alicia on a pic nic on the way .
  • We were going to meet in the afternoon, so I decided to go on a picnic with Alicia on the way.
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  • alicia was very happy to play with the snow.
  • Alicia was very happy to play with the in snow.
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  • at 2pm we went to the rendez-vous place
  • At 2pm we went to the rendez-vous the place we were going to meet at.
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  • i was so grateful to this woman to give me some of her time, as i am also very grateful to all the people who take time to correct my messages.
  • I was so grateful to the woman for giving me some of her time, as I am also very grateful to all the people who take the time to correct my messages.
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  • we spoke during 2 hours : culture, education, history, music a lot of topics and the time passed so quickly..we had some moments full of emotion .
  • We talked about many things during the 2 hours : culture, education, history, music, and a lot of other topics. and the time passed so quickly..we had some moments full of emotion . Time passed so quickly, we had many moments full of excitement and emotion.
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  • she will go in korea for a month to visit her family that she has not seen for almost 3 years.
  • She will go be in korea for a month to visit her family that she has not seen for almost 3 years.
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  • she was very happy to speak about her country, and she want me to speak with her, so when she will be back, we will talk on the phone.
  • She was very happy to talk about her country, and she wanted me to speak with her, so when she will be is back, we will talk on the phone again.
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  • i'm very happy ^^
  • I'm very happy ^^
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Rendez-vous is sometimes used in English but not very often. I rewrote those sentences with other things you could say without using Rendez-vous. When you say 'moments full of emotion' it hints that they were sad moments, so it may be better to use other adjetives like excited. When you want to say '3 years', you should write out 'three years'. It is very informal to write the number instead of spelling it.

Great entry! Keep up the good work ^^b
Jan 29th 2009 06:11 ExtraLean
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  • Spanish, German

  • alicia was very happy to play with the snow.
  • Alicia was very happy to play with the in the snow.
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  • at 2pm we went to the rendez-vous place
  • at 2pm we went to the rendez-vous place where we would meet the Korean.
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  • i was so grateful to this woman to give me some of her time, as i am also very grateful to all the people who take time to correct my messages.
  • ... just as I am grateful to all the people ...
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  • she will go in korea for a month to visit her family that she has not seen for almost 3 years.
  • She is going to go to Korea for the next month and visit her family which she hasn't seen for almost 3 years.
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  • she was very happy to speak about her country, and she want me to speak with her, so when she will be back, we will talk on the phone.
  • She was very happy to speak with me about her country and she was also was happy for me to speak with her in Korean. Today went really well, so we have organised to talk on the phone when she gets back.
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Just another way you could have written it. There was nothing overly wrong with the previous correction. I just thought you'd appreciate the extra options. Just as I appreciate them in mine.
Thom.
Jan 29th 2009 06:22 ExtraLean
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  • Spanish, German

  • it was great
  • It was great.
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  • today i met this korean woman i spoke with on the phone
  • Today I met with a Korean woman with which I had spoken on the phone.
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Jan 29th 2009 22:08 bleulavande
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  • Korean, German

JapanPlz : thank you for the corrections and also for the explanation about use of some words

Thom "I just thought you'd appreciate the extra options. Just as I appreciate them in mine." yes i do appreciate all the corrections. we also in french have some different ways to say the same thing !
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