R.I.P Whitney Houston

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I'm so shocked when I heard the sad news that Whitney Houston died. I wondered if the news was real or not.

Since I was younger, I've been a BIG fan of her. I've gone to her concerts twice. When I went to her concert first time, my seat was the best seat. I could sit in the front row. So, I could see her very well. When I waved her, she waved back to me while smiling. She was so beautiful. She seemed to be shining.
For a long time I've thought she is one of the best American female singers. Her voice is so clear. She can control her singing voice tones from soft to hard very well. I really love her voice. I love painting while listening to her music.

After she started to be addicted to drugs and became divorce, I think her voice changed a lot. Recently I haven't heard good news about her.
I always have thought although she is very talented, why she hasn't tried to use her talents in the best way. I've thought she should sing more.

It's sad people who are very talented died too young because of drugs. While listening to her music, I'd love to pray for her.

Feb 13th 2012 07:56 Maka Ling

  • I'm so shocked when I heard the sad news that Whitney Houston died.
  • I was so shocked when I heard the sad news that Whitney Houston had died.

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  • Since I was younger, I've been a BIG fan of her.
  • Since I was young, I've been a BIG fan of hers.

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  • When I went to her concert first time, my seat was the best seat.
  • When I went to her concert for the first time, my seat was the best seat.

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  • When I waved her, she waved back to me while smiling.
  • When I waved to her, she waved back to me while smiling.

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  • For a long time I've thought she is one of the best American female singers.
  • For a long time I've thought she was one of the best American female singers.

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  • After she started to be addicted to drugs and became divorce, I think her voice changed a lot.
  • After she started to be addicted to drugs and (became) divorced, I think her voice changed a lot.

 

  • I always have thought although she is very talented, why she hasn't tried to use her talents in the best way.
  • I always have wondered why she hasn't tried to use her talents in the best way, although she is very talented.

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I agree that it's a pity so many people ruin their lives by getting involved with drugs.

Whitney, will long be remembered for her talent and her beauty.
Feb 13th 2012 08:16 Maka Ling
I was so shocked when I heard the sad news that Whitney Houston had died.
you should use the past simple for "i was shocked", not the present simple (=i am shocked) because you are talking about the moment when you found out that she had died, and that is a moment in the past.
You should use the past perfect for "had died" however, because she died before you were shocked.

The rule is that you always have to use the past perfect tense for something that happened before something that happened in the past, unless you're talking about a succession of actions, for example: "I heard the news and became shocked" but "I had finished working when I heard the news and became shocked".

Sorry if you don't understand me very well, my Japanese is not good enough for me to explain you all this in Japanese, but I hope this explanation will help you!
Feb 13th 2012 08:17 Maka Ling
After she started to be addicted to drugs and (became) divorced, I think her voice changed a lot.
I put "became" between brackets because "became" doesn't have to be there, the sentence would still be correct if it were omitted. It is correct the way it is right now too, but I think it sounds more natural without it.
Feb 15th 2012 21:58 yumi
Hi, Maka Lang-san. Nice to meet you. Thanks for the wonderful correction and the suggestion. I'm sorry I couldn't reply to you soon. I've been very busy for preparing studying abroad to take some painting classes.
Feb 13th 2012 12:02 Curl

It's always sad news when someone as talented as her dies.
I think her life is a good example of the dangers that money and fame can have.

I think most Americans agree that her version of the U.S. National Anthem was the best ever.

Although she is gone, she will live forever in her music.



Feb 15th 2012 22:01 yumi
Hi, I'm very sorry I couldn't show up today. I was very busy to pack my luggage. Thanks for sharing the wonderful video clip. Her voice is so pretty. I really miss her voice. Talk to you tomorrow.

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