my mind was in a tumult

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The last few days, my mind was in a tumult. First of all, the LJ was baned by our country.. I have to write my post with a proxy.Why our country baned LJ ?And then there are many homeworks oppress me. Because something make my mind has a short circuit, I am lost interest in my homework. I always think about the thing.

So I haven't did my homework. Actually~I originally hate my homeworks. The homeworks are dissertations! I would rather draw 10 pics than write one dissertation. But, I have to write it today, because I must hand it in tomorrow. So I did an article on scene.

Actually I briefly analyzed the scence of "Le Papillon"~

This film is... hm...very good. The story is a little sad, but the atmosphere of the film is very relaxed~ The little girl in the film is very very cute. Although she has no father and her mother take care of her not very well, she still has a breezy personality and a pure heart.The sence in the film is very beautiful. The exterior shots were taken in Alps.

The little gilr follows a aloof old man to look for Isabella, a kind of moth more beautiful than butterfly. The aloof old man is very kind, and has a naive heart ~He is very cute old man .

Actors' lines of the film are very interesting~This film is very good ~This fact made my homework became a little interesting ~

I have to my another homework now...
Jan 05th 2009 12:05 Liren

  • my mind was in a tumult
  • My Mind was in a Tumult Since this is a title, capitalize the important words.

 

  • The last few days, my mind was in a tumult.
  • The sentence is better without a comma.

 

  • First of all, the LJ was baned by our country..
  • First of all, the LJ was banned by our country..

 

  • Why our country baned LJ ?And then there are many homeworks oppress me.
  • Why has our country banned LJ ?And then there are Many homeworks oppress me as well.

 

  • Because something make my mind has a short circuit, I am lost interest in my homework.
  • Because something make My mind has a short circuit. I am have lost interest in my homework.

 

  • I always think about the thing.
  • what thing? Be specific.

 

  • So I haven't did my homework.
  • So I haven't done my homework.

 

  • Actually~I originally hate my homeworks.
  • Actually ~ I originally have always hated my homework.

 

  • The homeworks are dissertations!
  • The homeworks assignments are dissertations! It just sounds better this way...

 

  • So I did an article on scene.
  • "on scene?" What are you talking about?

 

  • Actually I briefly analyzed the scence of "Le Papillon"~
  • Actually I briefly analyzed the scene of "Le Papillon"~

 

  • Although she has no father and her mother take care of her not very well, she still has a breezy personality and a pure heart.
  • Although she has no father and her mother doesn't take good care of her not very well, she still has a breezy personality and a pure heart. I don't understand what it means to have a "breezy" personality.

 

  • The exterior shots were taken in Alps.
  • The exterior shots were taken in the Alps.

 

  • The little gilr follows a aloof old man to look for Isabella, a kind of moth more beautiful than butterfly.
  • The little girl follows an aloof old man to look for an Isabella moth, a kind of moth more beautiful than a butterfly.

 

  • The aloof old man is very kind, and has a naive heart ~He is very cute old man .
  • The aloof old man is very kind, and has a naive heart. ~He is a very cute old man .

 

  • Actors' lines of the film are very interesting~This film is very good ~This fact made my homework became a little interesting ~
  • The actors' lines in the film are very interesting~This film is very good ~This fact made my homework become a little interesting ~

 

  • I have to my another homework now...
  • I have to do another homework now...

 
I think this post is much better than some of the earlier ones. Good work!
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