Essay: When should children start learning English? Be more specific in a title.

I'm writing this article to raise improve my academic writing ability.

I suggest that English should be taught in elementary school.

English is the best most common language of in the world. The word 'best' is too vague.

Now that it is said that the 70 percent of the information all around the world is written and spoken in English. In formal English you write numbers above twenty numerically.

Speaking English is necessary for Japan to co-exsist in the international society.

More The younger people are the faster and more easily and speadily they master a foreign language. I don't think 'speadily' is a real word.

In an During elementary school is the best time for children to start learning English.

For this reason, I totally agree with that English should be made a compulsory subject from the first grade of elementary school in Japan. This sentence is unnecessary because you said everything important here in the sentence above it. Combine it with the one above or leave it out.

Now that it is said that the seventy persent of the information all around the world is written and spoken in English. "seventy persent of the information" What is this?

More Younger people are, the more easily and speadily speedily able they to master a foreign language.

Comment: The title of this essay could be more descriptive (and that would be a good thing.) If left as it is, a number of points are left unclear such as who (is learning English) and why. English writing tends to be highly specific whenever possible. Specificity is not a hard requirement, but failure to be specific (without good reason given) is often seen as a sign of either sloppiness (unwilling to put forth the effort) or ignorance (insufficient understanding of the topic) . The other correction ("When should children ...") works fine, but I have added two alternative examples. 1) Should learning English be compulsory for small children? 2) On the appropriateness of compulsory English classes for young children.

Comment: Your original sentence is easily understood, but the correction made by a previous commentor (i.e. replaced "raise" with "improve") is an improvement.

Please correct any mistakes and mention whether you found this essay is convincing or not. Comment: Your original version is fine. My addition redirects the focus on the reader's reaction rather than the technical merit of the essay. I included it as an alternate style reference only.

Comment: When writing in English, starting a sentence with a connecting word is generally considered "bad form". Sometimes it is hard to avoid, and it often occurs in spoken English, but if you started a sentence this way during an essay assignment in an American English class you would probably lose points.

Comment: Both your original sentence and the suggested removal of "should" are good sentences, but they mean slightly different things. Your original sentence suggests(implies) that you are giving your opinion. Removing "should" changes the sentence so that it suggests(proposes) changing the education system.

English is the best/most common language of in the world. Comment: I think you intended "most" here. "Most" can only modify "common" and would suggest that English is the language you are most likely to encounter. "Best" is an adjective and can modify either "common", "language", or "common language". Each has its own subtle difference in meaning.

Now that it is said that the seventy percsent of the information all around the world is written and spoken in English. This sentence follows the rules of grammar correctly, but is unnecessarily wordy and indirect. An alternate way of saying this might be "Now that seventy percent of the world uses English" or "It is said that seventy percent of the information in the world today is in English.

Comment: I agree with the preceding corrections. The reason that you should not use "the" before "international society" is because "the" suggests a specific example from among several possibilities. Because there is only one "international society", you should not precede it with an article (i.e. "a", "an", "the", etc.)

More The younger people are, the more easily and speeadily they master a foreign language. Alternate: Younger people more readily adopt and master new/foreign languages.

Comment: Because this sentence carries on the thought from the previous sentence, you could connect them by removing the period from the last sentence and making the following change: ", therefore during In an elementary school is the best time for children to start learning English.

For this reason, I totally agree with(Alt. - with the proposition/idea) that English should be made a compulsory subject from the first grade of elementary school in Japan. Comment: I disagree with the previous post regarding the need for this sentence. The previous sentence makes a statement or observation. This sentence states approval of a course of action based on the preceding statement.