Abortion

Whether you support abortion or not, it's been a very controversial issue not only in Korea, but also in many other countries.

Just a small typo. :-)

Although South Korea doesn't allow its people to have abortions, there have been numerous protests about it.

More than one person ("people"), therefore more than one potential abortion. You could also keep abortion the way it is and say "Although South Korea doesn't allow a woman to have an abortion..." or something like that.

More than one movement, so "there have been", not "there has been".

I did rephrase the end of this sentence a little because "protest" is a much more specific and fitting word than "movement". (I think "movement" is usually used to describe one unified national endeavor. Like how the civil rights movement was one large movement with one set of goals. When you say "movements", it implies that each group has slightly different purpose or goal set.)

Also, writing out "anti-abortion law" seems like overkill because you already spelled out its existence in the first half.

Frankly speaking, I am against abortion except when pregnant women get into trouble that may threaten their lives.

Tiny nitpick. I think "get into trouble" is usually used when you're talking about an external calamity or series of accidents.

"Get in trouble" is more like, if a teacher or parent (or someone like that) is berating you because of something wrong you did.

But I want nobody reading this entry to have a controversial on the issue with anybody.

I'm not quite sure what you mean here?

(I'm not sure if it is okay to write about such a very serious issue, but I have made up my mind to keep going anyway.)

A little bit of an odd word order here, I hope this helps. "Anyway" sounds best at the end here just because the sentence is fairly complicated, but you could plausibly say "I have anyway made up my mind..." or "I have made up my mind anyway to..." and it wouldn't be wrong per se.

You may have seen a picture of a foetus in a pregnant woman's body on a screen, which is scanned by ultrasound.

"Figure" is most commonly used to describe the form of a human body. Here "picture" or "image" is best.

Some missing articles.

I don't know if echography actually is a word, but "ultrasound" is anyway the usual term for it.

You might watch some scene in which the foetus is moving its fingers or head.

Since this is a hypothetical, abstract situation, I think the present tense would be the default here.

I think "fingers" just sounds more natural, because there's not just one finger that fetuses usually move, but it's your call.

Some people say that because all fetuses are already human beings, having an abortion is a sinful action.

The normal way of pluralizing "fetus" is "fetuses". I don't know if that's correct or not, but that's what's normal.

By the way, the American spelling of fetus is, well, fetus, but maybe foetus is the British spelling - so I haven't corrected it.

Won kyung Yu, 20, one of my friends and a student majoring in chemistry at Chung Nam National University, thinks that when a foetus is formed in a woman's body, it is already a living thing.

In English, the family name always comes last. Many people wouldn't understand from your original that "Yu" is the family name, even though that's the correct way to present it in Korean.

All parts of a university's name are usually capitalized (except prepositions, e.g., "National Forestry University of San Diego" or whatever).

Third person singular conjugated required on "think".

Just a little dropped preposition after "formed".

It has the right to live and abortion shouldn't be performed by any obstetrician," said Yu, in a Kakaotalk chat room with me, in a harsh tone.

Even if the end of a piece of dialog is the natural end of a sentence, you end it with a comma if "said Yu" or something like that comes afterward.

Just one stylistic note: it is considered good style to never have more than one full sentence before the "said ___" part. So this and other quotes in your essay would typically be formulated like this:

"People should acknowledge that a foetus is as important as other human beings," said Yu. "It has the right to live..."

I haven't changed this in the official corrections because the sentences in the dialog themselves aren't grammatically incorrect, but this is the standard practice.

She also said that although people have a right to do whatever they want with their bodies, it shouldn't be thought to be more important than a foetus's right to live.

Small dropped article.

Some extreme people against abortion say lawmakers have to enact stricter anti-abortion laws to crack down on doctors performing illegal abortions and women aborting their children.

It's not clear if you mean laws that are more strict, or more laws that are strict. If the former, "stricter" sounds better.

I automatically changed "law" to "laws" because that's how it would typically be phrased - the idea is that there would probably be more than one law involved in the process - but now that I think about it, you could conceivably just have "law". It sounds a little weightier and more formal though.

If more than one woman, more than one child.

They think toughening penalties for those people is only the way to stamp out the illegally performed abortion.

"Rectify" means to right something - to take something that was incorrect or wrong and correct it. I think you mean "eliminate" or "ban". "Stamp out" is a bit colloquial but a more fun way of putting it - think of someone trying to stamp a bunch of ants to death.

Roman Catholicism is the religion that is most opposed to the pro-choice movement.

I get what you're saying here, but it's not a very typical way of phrasing things. This gets right to the point.

According to its "New Canonical Bylaw" published in 1995, along with euthanasia, abortion should be regarded as a ethical disorder along with euthanasia.

The words in formal charters (except for prepositions) are always capitalized.

"Along with euthanasia" really does better at the end of the sentence because, with where it is in the original, we really have no idea what it's supposed to be along with until we get to "ethical disorder" at the end of the sentence.

Any form of laws that human beings have legislated so far can't justify such things.

Just little typos.

It also says that even unwanted pregnancy, caused by rape, also doesn't justify the need of abortion.

Third person plural verb conjugation demanded for "it". The second "also" isn't necessary because there's already an also in the sentence.

If people don't want to go through with the pregnancy, they should get abortion without any interference, they say.

"They" isn't a real person per se - or at least it's not anyone specific that you've mentioned before - so the present tense is best for connoting the kind of hypothetical...ness you want here.

For example, if I were a farmer and my farmer neighbor said to me, "They say it's going to rain today", I understand that it's not a specific person who's said that necessarily, but that there's been general talk about the subject.

If he said "They said it's going to rain", though, I would be much more likely to think that "They" is an actual, specific group of people.

Min kying Byun, 22, a female student majoring in the fine arts at the faculty of art in Chung Nam National University, warns that banning abortion will screw up women's lives.

Same issues as above.

Abortion is a woman's right just like the right to free speech.

I'm not sure how to explain the latter two changes here. "Just like" is better than "like" here, I think, because it's much more emphatic - and Min Kying sounds very fired up about the subject, so it fits.

"The right..." - When we talk about rights, we almost always have it in a fixed phrase like this. Like, "I care a lot about the right to bear arms", etc.

Obviously, the right to abortion is an extension of the right to freedom.

Same as the previous sentence.

As long as abortion can save women's lives, it should be an acceptable thing.

"An" because the next word begins with a vowel.

And a little typo.

She also pointed out that the mental and emotional disorders women possibly suffer from.

Mental problems tend to be described as disorders. "Disease" sounds more physical.

"Every woman who gives birth to an unwanted baby will suffer from mortal mental disorder for the rest of her life.

I'm not sure what "mortal" means here.

"An" is necessary.

Which do you think is more unhappy?

I'm a little confused here because when you ask a "Which is more unhappy?" kind of question, you naturally expect that the next sentence will present a choice. But the next sentence is about both the negative consequences that would come from not having an abortion - not about a choice between them.

Living with an unwanted child while having a mental illness?" she added.

Same as before.

Pro-choice people think that there's no need of any sanctions to make people obey such a ridiculous law.

Just a little typo.

I think "sanctions" is slightly better here, because any kind of sanction could be proposed.

Some obstetricians and gynecologists rebut the anti-abortion law, saying that the reason why we are doing it is for the sake of the mother's health.

A comma gives a nice breather here.

"Why" is not necessary when you're saying something like, "The reason we're doing it is..."

In hypothetical situations, we talk about abstract people types with definite articles. Like, "What are the problems that affect the modern firefighter?", or "What challenges does the average stay-at-home dad face?"

They also say that religious belief should not be forced on those who don't view this issue in the same way and that these beliefs are is totally out of sync with reality.

I think you might have just dropped a word here.

When you say just "the belief", it's not entirely clear which belief you're referring to.

In Korea, both getting an abortion and performing it are illegal.

Next word starts with a vowel, so "an".

Under present law, except for pregnancy resulting from rape or incest, and pregnancy risking awoman's health, every form of abortion is banned.

A little better way of phrasing it.

You could also say, "has been banned".

In 2010, as the government tightened enforcement on abortion, there have been lots of debates.

When you're referring to the government of a specific country, it's always "the government". You may drop the article if you're talking about the idea of government as an abstract concept.

In my opinion, the important thing is cracking down on a back alleys.

Little spelling mistake.

Plural sounds better here because there could be multiple ways to circumvent the law.

Back alley is generally not hyphenated.

The annual abortion rate among fertile Korean women is higher than that of other OECD (Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development) member countries.

A space is necessary between OECD and the parenthesis.

To make matters worse, the reported cases of abortion may be just the tip of iceberg.

You could also say "the reported incidence of", which would sound even better, I think.

"Just" helps the sentence along because it makes the situation sound even more dire.

Because performing abortions is a lucrative business for obstetricians and some pregnant women want to have an abortion, it would be a win-win situation for them.

"Performing abortions" is the standard phrase here, not practicing.

Another serious thing is the notion of preferring a son to a daughter.

Only one notion of preferring sons to daughters - that is, if it were a different idea, it would be a different notion, so there can only be one. Therefore the article required is "the", not "a".

Abortion can be abused for the purpose of giving birth to only sons, not daughters.

There are many potential sons and many potential daughters in play here, so plurals are best.

There are even parents that walk out on their daughters.

Multiple parents, thus, multiple daughters.

The way I see it, no matter how strictly you crack down on abortion, the endless debate on it - what Koreans call "a never spoiled bait" - will never go away.

You need a subject of some kind in that clause there. You could also say "no matter how strictly the government cracks..." or something like that.

The sentence starts getting a little too convoluted toward the end. Dashes set the clause off a little more distinctly than commas and that might help. "What" instead of "which" because "what" is standing in for "a thing that".

I took out the Korean alphabet because it makes things a little too information-packed and English speakers (including me, unfortunately) aren't able to read it at all anyway.

"To be disappeared" is not a very common phrase at all, I don't think I've ever heard it in English. "To go away" is better and more typical.

Whether you support abortion or not, it's been a very controversial issue not only in Korea, but also in any other countries.

This is correct, but it doesn't flow very smoothly. Try:
"Whether you support it or not, abortion has been a very controversial issue not only in Korea, but also in any other countries."

Although South Korea doesn't allow its people to have an abortions, there have been numerous movements surrounding the anti-abortion law.

Is there a single law or a set of laws? If there is only one this is correct, other wise it should read "surrounding anti-abortion laws."

Frankly speaking, I am against abortion except when pregnant women has a life threatening condition.

But I want nobody reading this entry to have a controversial on the issue with anybody.

When writing on a serious issue, it's best to address concerns over controversy prior to the piece. You could take one or two sentences prior to the introduction stating that you're writing on abortion, and state that you do not wish to offend anyone or spur heated arguments. Once you're in the body of the piece (such as here) you don't need to stop to defend yourself. The reader should know this is your view.

(I'm not sure if it is okay to write about such a serious issue, but I have made my mind to keep it up.)

Is abortion murder?

Correct assuming this is a heading.

You may have seen a ultrasound of fetus in pregnant woman's body on screen, which is scanned by sonography.

I'll just correct this once to avoid unnecessary edits. Fetus.

If you simply say "ultrasound picture" or just "ultrasound" native English speakers will instantly know what you are referring too. Few actually know what sonography is, in spite of it being the same thing.

Figure is generally a diagram in a technical document, or it's commonly used to describe the quality of a person's body. A skiny woman might be said to have a "slender figure."

Some people say that because all foetus are already living human beings, having an abortion is a sinful action.

Correct, but adding living brings emphasis.

Yu, Won kyung, 20, one of my friends and a student majoring in chemistry at Chung Nam National University, thinks that when a fetus is formed a woman's body, it is already a living being.

When writing someones name in English you almost always write it as "First Name Last Name" (or First name Family name). When writing a name as Smith, John it suggests to the reader that this person's family name is Smith, and their personal name is John. When referencing him in a sentence though, he would introduced as John Smith without any comma.

It has the right to live, and abortion shouldn't be performed by any obstetrician." said Yu, in a Kakaotalk chat room with me, in a harsh tone.

By saying "shouldn't be performed by any obstetrician" this implies to a reader that it might be okay if it was done by someone else. If you're translating her speech, then you have some freedom in how you write this quote, if she said this in english you'd be better off simply ending the quote early. The context of the quote isn't changed in this example, you simply improve the flow of your paper.

Also, while the follow up is correct "in a Kakaotalk chat room with me, in a harsh tone." It doesn't fit with the subject mater of your paper. You could simply end this sentence as:
shouldn't be performed," said Yu.

She also said that although people have a right to do whatever they want with their bodies, it shouldn't be thought to be more important than foetus's right to live.

This is actually correct, but it may cause some english readers to stumble for a moment and reread the sentence.

Some extreme people against abortion say lawmakers must have to enact more strict anti-abortion laws, to crack down on doctors performing illegal abortions and women receiving them aborting their child.

Religious individuals are strongly against abortion.

Roman Catholics stand as the most opposing view to the pro-choice movement.

According to the Catholic Church's "New canonical by-law" published in 1995, along with euthanasia, abortion should be regarded as a ethical disorder.

I'm not familiar enough with Catholic law to correct this properly, but depending upon how the church has named the law, this might need some minor tweaks.

No form of laws that man has crafted so far can't justify such action.

In english "Man" is often sometimes used to refer to "humans" or "mankind" as a whole. This is usually done to increase the firmness of a statement, and make it feel more certain.

This would be a great opportunity to use the phrase "thus far" if you wanted to rather than "so far."

This by-law also says even unwanted pregnancy, caused by rape, does not justify the need of abortion.

Isn't abortion murder?

As a heading, this actually is very similar to the first. "Is abortion murder?" asks a question. "Isn't abortion murder?" asks the exact same question, but expects that the correct response is yes. This section probably won't lend itself to a heading in the form of a question.

One argument for legalizing abortion is that people have the right to make their own choices concerning their bodies.

If people don't want to go through with the pregnancy, they should get abortion without any interference, they said.

They is currently an undefined group of people. You should either find an individual specifically (or a protest group), or refer to this currently unnamed group somewhere earlier in the piece as abortion supporters.

"That's a crazy idea, Won kyung.

If she said That's directly, you can take a small liberty in writing pieces. It's clear that this quote is in response to a question, but you could restate this as:
"[banning abortion is] a crazy idea, Won kyung

Putting brackets [] around a section of text in a quote tells the reader that this isn't exactly what a speaker said, but the speaker said something that in context meant what was put in brackets.

Abortion is woman's right, like right to free speech.

Before worrying about the foetus, we have to worry about women's survival!" Byun said in a kakatolk chat room.

Again, this could simply be replaced by:
about women's survival!" said Byun.

What you have is correct, but it doesn't always fit the setting of the piece.

She also pointed out that the mental and emotional disease women might suffer from.

Pre-choice people think that there's no need of any sanction to make people obey a law they view as ridiculous.

by stating "such a ridiculous law" directly the reader may become confused (although only briefly) that this might be your view as well. By making this change you still state the same information, but you distance yourself from the view personally.

Some obstetricians and gynecologists rebut the anti-abortion law saying that the reason why they are action it is for the sake of a mother's health.

They also say that religious belief should not be forced on those who don't view this issue in the same way, further claiming the belief is totally out of sync with reality.

This still feels a little bit rough, but it gets your point across. It's something that a high level english professor might dislike, but it's on par with what most college level American students would write.

In Korea, both getting a abortion and performing one is illegal.

In which Korea? English readers would expect you to explicitly distinguish between North Korea and South Korea.

Under present law, except for pregnancy resulting from rape or incest, or life threatening risk to a woman's health, every form of abortion has banned.

In 2010, as the government tightened enforcement on abortion, there have been many of debates.

In my opinion, the important thing is craking down on so-called "back-alley" abortions.

back-alley is a typically slang term. Using it is okay, but in a paper one would note that it is slang by putting it in quotes.

The annual abortion rate among fertile Korean women is higher than that of other Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development (OECD) member countries.

To make matters worse, the reported case of abortion may not be indicative of actual abortion rates.

"Tip of the iceberg" is usually used to refer to something after the fact. It suggests more than is going on than is readily apparent, but usually isn't used directly with numerical things. One might say: "A student cheated on the homework, but that is just the tip of the iceberg. They also cheated on their exams."

As practicing abortions is a lucrative business for obstetricians, and as some pregnant women want to have an abortion in spite of current laws, unreported abortions might still take place.

Saying something is a win-win is fine, but this sentence builds an idea, then doesn't come out and say it. Adding that last clause allows this sentence to build up an idea and make it all the more powerful when it is stated plainly.

Another serious issue thing is a notion of preferring a son to a daughter.

There are even parents that walk out on their daughter.

A second clause here might help. It wouldn't bring any new ideas, but stating what the reader knows you're implying can sometimes help bring strength to your paper.

For example: "There are even parents that walk out on their daughter, preferring to no child if they cannot have a son."

The way I see it, no matter how strictly crack down on abortion is regulated, the issue—which Korean call it 만년떡밥 (A never spoiled bait)—will never be disappeared.

Crack-down is the slang action of being strict, so in a sense this says strict twice.

Whether you support abortion or not, it's been a very controversial issue, not only in Korea, but also in any (many) other countries.

If you want to stress that abortion is a controversial issue in a lot of countries, you can add "many".

Although South Korea doesn't allow its people to have an abortions, there have been numerous movements about the anti-abortion law.

Because you are talking about the South Korean people (multiple people) having abortions you need to use the plural "abortions". I switched "has" to "have" because it needs to agree with the plural "numerous movements".

Frankly speaking, I am against abortion, except for when pregnant women get in trouble have complications that may threaten their lives.

"having complications" is a common term for this situation.

Regarding "except" vs. "except for", I believe "except for" is proper. I am poor at explaining subtle grammar points, but on this forum:

http://www.usingenglish.com/forum/ask-teacher/4527-except-vs-except.html

the post by CuriousT might be helpful.

But I want nobody reading this entry to have an argument controversial on the issue with anybody.

Saying "I want nobody" is technically correct, but it will sound more natural if you say "I don't want anybody". Also with that correction it sounds weird to have two "anybody"'s, so you could switch the last anybody with a word like "other readers".

"But I don't want anybody reading this entry to have an argument on the issue with other readers."

(I'm not sure if it is okay to write about such the a very serious issue, but I have made my mind to keep it up anyway.)

You may have seen a figure of a foetus in a pregnant woman's body on screen, which was scanned created by echography.

There are many ways you can write this sentence, for example:

1) You may have seen an echograph of a fetus in a pregnant woman's body.
2) You may have seen an ultrasound of a fetus in a pregnant woman's body.
3) You may have seen the image of a fetus in a pregnant woman's body using an ultrasound display.

I had to look up Ecography, and it looks like it is the same thing as Sonography/Ultra Sounds. The term "ultra sound" is most commonly used where I live. Also you can use either 'foetus" or "fetus". In America, "fetus" is the most common spelling.

You might have watched some scene in which the foetus was moving its finger or head.

You could also simplify the sentence by removing "some scene" and it will have the same meaning.

"You might have watched a foetus moving its finger or head."

Some people say that because all foetus are already human beings, having an abortion is a sinful action.

Your sentence sounds perfectly natural. It can be simplified a little by removing "all" and "already" because they are somewhat implied.

1)Some people say that because a foetus is a human being, having an abortion is a sinful act.
2)Some people say that because a foetus is a human being, having an abortion is sinful.

Yu, Won kyung, 20, one of my friends and a student majoring in chemistry at Chung Nam National University, thinks that when a foetus is formed in a woman's body, it is already a living thing.

I believe Chungnam National University is the complete title of the school so you need to also capitalize "national" and "university".

Stating Yu's name and age at the beginning of the sentence is fine, but sounds a little unnatural. In my examples below I rearrange the sentence so the name is more naturally place in the sentence. In the second example I add the age, although this isn't necessary information.

Also, calling a fetus a "living thing" is kind of like referring to a person as "it" rather than "he". You could fix this by using the word "alive" or "living being".

1) My friend Yu Won Kyung, a student majoring in chemistry at Chung Nam National University, thinks that when a foetus is formed in a woman's body, it is already a living being.

2) My friend Yu Won Kyung, a 20 year old student majoring in chemistry at Chung Nam National University, thinks that when a foetus is formed in a woman's body, it is already alive.

Here is how I personally would write it:

My friend Yu Won Kyung, a student majoring in chemistry at Chungnam National University, thinks that a fetus is alive once it is formed.

It has the right to live and abortion shouldn't be performed by any obstetrician." said Yu, in a Kakaotalk chat room with me, in a harsh tone.

What you wrote is perfectly correct. When you describe how and where she told you it sounds a bit clustered. You could simplify this by removing "with me" as it is implied she was talking to you because you are quoting her. Or you can simplify by using a verb other than "said" which implies a harsh tone, such as "barked", or "protested". I believe "vociferated" is the most fitting word, but most people don't know that word.

1) In a Kakaotalk chat room Yu protested, "People should acknowledge.....by any obstetrician."

2) With a harsh tone, in a Kakaotlak chat room, Yu said, "People should acknowledge.....by any obstetrician."

She also said that although people have a right to do whatever they want with their bodies, it shouldn't be thought to be more important than a foetus's right to live.

Some extreme people against abortion say lawmakers have to enact more strict anti-abortion laws to crack down on doctors performing illegal abortions and women aborting their child.

A common term to describe "extreme people" is "radicals". Usually in America this term is combined with the associated political party or stance, like "radical liberals", or "radical conservatives".

I am not sure if you are saying the people are extreme or if they are just extremely against abortion. If you want to say they are extremely against abortion you would say:

"Some people who are extremely against abortion say lawmakers should enact more strict anti-abortions laws to crack down on doctors performing illegal abortions and women having abortions."

In my example sentence I switch "aborting their child" to "having abortions" because they aren't necessarily aborting a single child or having a single abortion.

They think tougher penalties for those people is the only the way to rectify the illegally performed abortion.

Toughening doesn't sound very natural and can be replaced by "tougher", or if you want a verb like "toughening" you can use the word "increasing".

"They think increasing penalties for those people is the only the way to rectify the illegally performed abortion."

People who believe in religion are strongly against abortion.

Perfect. You could also say "Religious people are strongly against abortion."

Roman Catholicism is the religion that stands in the farthest position furthest from the pro-choice movement.

According to its "New Canonical Bylaw" published in 1995, along with euthanasia, abortion should be regarded as an ethical disorder.

Any form of laws that human beings have legislated so far can't justify such things.

It also says that even unwanted pregnancy caused by rape also doesn't justify the need of an abortion.

I removed "also" because you already had also at the beginning of the sentence. I took out "the need of", because I imagine it doesn't justify the act of abortion.

One argument for legalizing abortion is that people have the right to make their own choices when it comes to their bodies.

If people don't want to go through with a pregnancy, they should get an abortion without any interference, they said.

Byun, Min kying, 22, a female student majoring in the fine arts at the faculty of art in Chung Nam National University, warns that banning abortion will screw up a woman's life.

Similar to the comment with Yu Won Kyung, the age isn't necessary and you can place Min's name inside the sentence to make it sound more natural

Abortion is a woman's right, like the right to free speech.

Obviously, the right to have an abortion is an extension of the right of freedom.

As long as abortion can save women's lives, it should be an acceptable thing.

She also pointed out the mental and emotional disease women can possibly suffer from.

"Every woman who gives birth to an unwanted baby will suffer from mortal mental disorder for the rest of her life.

Which do you think is more unhappy?

Your sentence is correct. You could also use "sadder" instead of "more unhappy".

"Which do you think is sadder?"

Living with an unwanted child while having a mental illness?" she added.

Pro-choice people think that there's no need for a sanction to make people obey such a ridiculous law.

Some obstetricians and gynecologists rebut the anti-abortion law saying that the reason why they are doing it is for the sake of mother's health.

You could simplify the sentence by saying:

Some obstetricians and gynecologists rebut the anti-abortion law by saying that they are doing it for the sake of mother's health.

They also say that religious beliefs should not be forced on those who don't see this issue in the same way and that religious beliefs are totally out of sync with reality.

I made religious belief plural because there are multiple religions who don't agree with abortion, not just Roman Catholicism.

In Korea, both getting an abortion and performing abortions are illegal.

Under present law, except for pregnancy resulting from rape or incest, or pregnancy where there is a risk to a woman's health, every form of abortion has been banned.

In 2010, as the government tightened enforcement of abortion laws, there have been lots of debates.

In my opinion, the important thing is cracking down on back-alley abortions.

Or you could say:

In my opinion, the important thing is cracking down on the back-alley.

To make matters worse, the reported cases of abortion may be the tip of the iceberg.

Because practicing abortions is a lucrative business for obstetricians and some pregnant women want to have abortions, it would be a win-win situation for them.

Another serious thing is the notion of preferring a son to a daughter.

Abortions can be abused for the purpose of giving birth to only sons and not daughters.

Since some people might also only want daughters you could write:

Abortions can be abused for the purpose of selecting the gender of a baby.

There are even parents that walk out on their daughters.

The way I see it, no matter how strictly we/they crack down on abortion, the endless debate on it, which Korean call it 만년떡밥(A never spoiled bait), will never be disappeared.

You can use either we or they, which can be a subtle hint to if you support the government's current actions or not.

Although South Korea doesn't allow its people to have abortions, there has been numerous voices of opposition against them.

Frankly speaking, I am against abortion except when pregnant women get in trouble with threatening their lives.

(I'm not sure if it is okay to write about such a very sensitive issue, but I have made up my mind to keep going on anyway.)

serious보다는 sensitive가 나을듯 ㅋ

Some people may argue that because all foetus are already human beings, having an abortion is a immoral action.

Wonkyung Yu, 20, one of my friends and a student majoring in Biochemistry at Chung-Nam National University, think that when a foetus is formed in a woman's body, it is already a living creature.

생화학과임ㅋ

It has the right to live and abortion should not be allowed by any obstetrician." said Yu, in a Kakaotalk chat room with me, in her harsh tone.

She also said that although people have a right to do whatever they want with their bodies, it shouldn't be considered more important than foetuses' right to live.

plural of "foetus" -> foetuses

Some extreme people who are against abortion say legislators have to enact more strict anti-abortion law to crack down on illegal abortions.

redundancy~~

They think enforcing penalties for those people is only the way to eradicate illegal abortion.

Roman Catholics stand on the top of the side of dissent over the pro-choice movement.

One argument for legalizing abortion is that people have the right to make their own choices in terms of their bodies.

If people do not want to go through with the pregnancy, they should get abortion without any interference, they said

Minkyung, Byun, 22, a female student majoring Visual Design at the College of Art in Chung-Nam National University, warns that the prohibition of abortion will screw up women's life.

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"That's ridiculous, Won kyung.

Abortion is a woman's right, like a free speech.

Obviously, the right of abortion is an extension of right to freedom.

Furthermore, it's the matter of pregnant women's lives!

Before worrying about the foetus, we have to worry about women's lives!" Byun said in a kakatolk chat room.

In Korea, both of undergoing and processing abortions are illegal.

To make matters worse, the reported cases of abortions may be the tip of the iceberg.

Because surgical procedure of abortions is a lucrative business for obstetricians and some pregnant women want to have an abortion, it would be a win-win strategy for all of them.