Smoking[ Please improve my interesting essay and give me many corrections!]
Dec 08th 2011 12:40
Smoking have a bad effect on our health. Do you think smoking is a good way to remove the stress out of our body? In my opinion, I disagree with this. The reason why I can`t agree this is the effect on our lifespan, appetite, and education for all children.
First, smoking shorten the longetivity. For example, it is the fact that the heavy smoker have much more negative effect than the non-smoker in terms of general opinion. In my case, I know my father had been continuing to get smoke without hesitation for 30 years, and then he got pancreas cancer when he became 56 years old as well as Alzheimer`s which has killed him in 2007. He should have accepted my advice when I warned his health at the local hospital.
Second, smoking have a negative effect on the appetite. In Japan, those who can`t stop smoking everyday tends to skip the meal at least three times in a week, and they become one of the addicts which causes a number of serious diseases because of wanting of nurition.
Finally, smoking is definitely bad for the education for all children. ALthough the age which can start smoking is regalated 20 years old in Japan, a number of children under 20 years old has already been geeting a huge amount of smoking despite the warning of their parents since an high school student. Smoking of the children have not only bad health, but the deterioration of the manner in their life. As they get smoke behind their parents, their bad manner would be escalated which may cause the criminal such as the theft because of this. Therefore, Japanese govenment should make the regulation of smoking law strict by raising the smoking taxation even higher than now so that many teenagers can`t get it easily like now. At the same time, all parents and government should get the oppotunity to discuss the regulation on smoking law every once in a month.
Consequently, I disagree with the smoking.
First, smoking shorten the longetivity. For example, it is the fact that the heavy smoker have much more negative effect than the non-smoker in terms of general opinion. In my case, I know my father had been continuing to get smoke without hesitation for 30 years, and then he got pancreas cancer when he became 56 years old as well as Alzheimer`s which has killed him in 2007. He should have accepted my advice when I warned his health at the local hospital.
Second, smoking have a negative effect on the appetite. In Japan, those who can`t stop smoking everyday tends to skip the meal at least three times in a week, and they become one of the addicts which causes a number of serious diseases because of wanting of nurition.
Finally, smoking is definitely bad for the education for all children. ALthough the age which can start smoking is regalated 20 years old in Japan, a number of children under 20 years old has already been geeting a huge amount of smoking despite the warning of their parents since an high school student. Smoking of the children have not only bad health, but the deterioration of the manner in their life. As they get smoke behind their parents, their bad manner would be escalated which may cause the criminal such as the theft because of this. Therefore, Japanese govenment should make the regulation of smoking law strict by raising the smoking taxation even higher than now so that many teenagers can`t get it easily like now. At the same time, all parents and government should get the oppotunity to discuss the regulation on smoking law every once in a month.
Consequently, I disagree with the smoking.
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Smoking has a bad effect on our health.
Do you think smoking is a good way to remove/relieve the stress out of our body?
The reason why I can`t agree with this is the effect it has on our lifespan, appetite, and for the education of all children.
First, smoking [shortens longetivity./one's lifespan.]
For example, it is a fact that the heavy smokers have much more negative effect than the non-smokers in terms of general opinion.
In my case, I know my father had been continuing to get smoke without hesitation for 30 years, and then he got pancreas cancer when he became 56 years old as well as Alzheimer`s which has killed him in 2007.
He should have accepted my advice when I warned him about his health at the local hospital.
Second, smoking has a negative effect on the appetite.
In Japan, those who can`t stop smoking everyday tend to skip a meal at least three times in a week, and they become one of the addicts which causes a number of serious diseases because of a nuritient deficit.
Although the age at which people can start smoking is regulated to 20 years of age in Japan, a number of teenagers under 20 years old have already been [getting a huge amount of smoking/smoking heavily] despite the warnings of their parents since high school.
Smoking by young people has not only a detrimental health result, but the deterioration of the manner of their life.
As they get smoke [behind their/in seclusion from their] parents, their bad manner/behavior would be escalated in criminal activities such as the theft because of this.
Therefore, the Japanese govenment should make the regulation of smoking law strict by raising the taxation of smoking even higher than now so that many teenagers can`t get cigarettes easily now.
At the same time, all parents and government should get the oppotunity to discuss the regulation of smoking laws every month.
Consequently, I disagree with the smoking/I am against smoking.
Smoking[ Please improve my interesting essay and give me many corrections!] You can't call your own essay interesting. 大風呂敷だよ。:)
He should have accepted taken my advice when I warned his health at the local hospital.
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