The suprising educational system in the US
Jan 05th 2012 14:48
Many American universities has a lot of educational supporting system to all students in the world. For example, finantial aids is one of the biggest supporting system to the students whose houses are poor. If the students have no ability to pay all tuitions, they can get the opportunity to get enough money to graduate from the university they enrolled in. Although the educational supporting system to the American students are pretty convinient for them to have a good college life, the supporting system to the international students are not well like the American students . Therefore, the possibility to get finantial aids for all international students is much lower than that of American one, which makes it more difficult to concentrate on studying academics they major in in the US. All of the American universities should give more finantial aids to the international students as they do to the American students if they want to internationalize their campas around diversity more. If they will spend much money on costing to the international students through the finatial aids, their universities would be more attractive for all international students than now, which gives them much profits from all of them in the world.
Many American universities have a lot of educational supporting system available to all students in the world. Need a verb to link the nouns together.
For example, financial aid is one of the biggest supporting system provided to the students come from poor families. Again, verb needed. Second correction is more natural.
If the students have no ability to pay all of the tuition, they have the opportunity to get enough money to graduate from the university they enrolled in. tuition if uncountable. Two "get"s sounds awkward.
Although the educational supporting system for American students are fairly convenient for them to have a good college life, the supporting system for the international students is not as good as that provided to the American students. Or you can use "for" instead of a verb (the verb is implied i.e. provided for, made for, intended for etc). "Fairly" is a more formal word.
Therefore, the possibility to get financial aid for all international students is much lower than that of American students, which makes it more difficult to concentrate on studying subjects they major in while at a US university. "in in" is awkward.
All of the American universities should give more financial aid to the international students as they do to the American students if they want to internationalize their campus around diversity more. Don't need as it is implied.
If they will spend a great deal of money on costing to the international students through the financial aids, their universities would be more attractive for all international students compared to now, which gives them greater profits from all over the world. No one says "much money" although technically correct.