この日記を修正して、ありがとうございます。
はい。私の血は「誰かの命が助けるかも」と思ってて、うれしいです。

Nice to meet you! Thank you for correcting!
I sure made simple mistakes in many of the sentences.

I can't write my explanation in Japanese for the one sentence you could not understand (not that I do not blame you), so if you can't read all of it, I'm sorry. Don't mind it. You don't have to give me an answer. You've helped me enough just by correcting my terrible Japanese. :)


>見ていた男子がこんなことについてかわいそうな者ですね。

I had no idea how to write this sentence at all in Japanese, I couldn't understand it well myself.
In English it was suppose to be:

"Aside from the strangers I saw at the donation center, a lot of men, no offense, seem to be complete pussies about these things."

I already didn't know how to make the sentence in Japanese to begin with, so I tried making it more simple:

"The men I saw were pathetic when it came to these kind of things."

(I just realized the Japanese sentence I wrote should have been in past tense)

Anyway, "the men" is the topic. "I saw" is giving more detail of "the men." In Japanese, adjectives and descriptions are put before the noun it describes.

" こんな" basically means "such" in English, and it was one of the first words that popped into my head to use for "these things." "Things" would be represented by こと.

について means "about" or "concerning (of)." "(when) it came to..." I thought it can also mean "(when) it concerned of..."

I did not know the word "pussie" in Japanese. I am quite sure, literally, the Japanese do not use the same terms we do. So I had to get close as I can get to the original meaning I intended. So かわいそう means "pathetic." This was the closest word that came to mind which can represent what I originally meant. I had to add a な as it is followed after the adjective (or is a part of), so I can attach it to 者, which this kanji refers to (a) person(s).

And as I said earlier, it was my mistake but the sentence should have been in the past tense.


Being that I teach myself Japanese, I am limited to certain resources. I do not know all the grammar, vocabulary, and I still need to know more about the culture to understand how Japanese people prefer to write their sentences. Generally this is how I review my sentences.


When I read and hear Japanese, it makes sense, but I just cannot apply it to my own writing. Is there a main grammar point that I still have to learn? Just what am I missing?

I understand your intention except for "pussies".

「見ていた男子がこんなことについてかわいそうな者ですね。」
⇒「献血所で私が見た男に限らず、たいていの男はこういったことが苦手のようで、情けないものです。」

I interpret "a lot of men are pussies about these things" as the meaning of "a lot of men are poor at these things and I feel sorry for them".

In a way, yes. That is a very close interpretation. I wouldn't include the "and I feel sorry for them" since I was cutting them down.
Thank you!

As always, thank you for the corrections.

1. The rest of Christmas day was spent at home with my beloved family.

or

2. I spent the rest of Christmas day at home with my beloved family.

Both say the same thing, but as you know, it's in a different voice. I'd say most people will go with the second sentence. I just chose to write that sentence in a different voice because to me, it just felt better with the style of my writing.

>見ていた男子がこんなことについてかわいそうな者ですね。
I had no idea how to translate this sentence. It must have been hard to figure out what I was trying to say (I just gave it a shot). Thank you for your correction.

Thank you for telling me the answer. I lately wonder which tense would be more natural because I often see naive speakers use few Subject as "I". Is it possible that if I often start my conversation from "I" someone would be annoyed ? Thank you.

>見ていた男子がこんなことについてかわいそうな者ですね。

I have not understand what you wanted to say yet. Sorry. I have read your additional explanation on Yoshi's comment column. However I can't. I would appreciate if you would tell me the pathetic man was your brother. If so I feel your original sentence made a bit sense.

^ Oh, I was just kind of insulting men in general in that sentence. Most men I see seem to be so scared of getting their own blood taken from them and I thought it was pathetic.

As for your question, I think I understand what you mean. In English, we hate to hear the same words used over and over again. That might be the reason why we change voice sometimes. I tend to do this in Japanese too, which leads to plenty of mistakes. I'll try and find examples later or ask my English teacher in detail when I get back to school soon.