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Apr 11th 2012 20:22
After I finish writing this entry, I will try to color my hair myself.
My hair is black now, and I want to change it natural brown.
I'm a freshman, and all of my friend's hair is brown now.

This is first time I try to color.
When I finish it, I'd like to write my thoght of coloring to lang-8 again.
Becky
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 11th 2012 20:28
  • After I finish writing this entry, I will try to color my hair myself.

  • (Or:) After I finish writing this entry, I will try to dye my hair myself.

 
  • My hair is black now, and I want to change it natural brown.

  • My hair is black now, and I want to change it to natural brown.

 
  • This is first time I try to color.

  • This is the first time I will try to dye my hair.

 
  • When I finish it, I'd like to write my thoght of coloring to lang-8 again.

  • When I finish it, I'd like to write my thoughts about dying my hair on lang-8 again.

    (Or) When I've finished coloring my hair, I will about it on Lang-8 again.

 
I hope the coloring went well! :) This is very well written, only a few little things to remember. Wonderful work. :D
Apr 13th 2012 23:19 sonoahot
Thanks.
jezarinn
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 12th 2012 00:08
  • My hair is black now, and I want to change it natural brown.

  • My hair is black now, and I want to dye it natural brown. / ...change it to...

 
  • I'm a freshman, and all of my friend's hair is brown now.

  • I'm a freshman, and all of my friends' hair is brown now.

    "All my" means that you have more than one friend so you should use the plural "friends" in this sentence :)

 
  • This is first time I try to color.

  • This is first time coloring my hair. / ...dying my hair.

 
  • When I finish it, I'd like to write my thoght of coloring to lang-8 again.

  • When I finish it, I'd like to write my thoughts on coloring it on lang-8 again/later.

 
I've never coloured my hair too >.< but I kinda like that it's black :)
Apr 13th 2012 23:19 sonoahot
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