First English diary

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Jul 28, 2012 10:41
From now on,I start to write diary with English.Because I want to be an English speaker which can live in America without an interpreter.And sometime,I plan to go to the United States to study computer science.
I really love a Hollywood movie,so to acquire an ability enough to understand movie in English is the concrete aim of studying English.

これから、私は英語で日記を書きます。なぜなら、私は通訳者がいなくてもアメリカで生活できる英語話者になりたいからです。そしていつか、コンピュータサイエンスを学びにアメリカに留学しようと考えています。
私はハリウッド映画が好きなので、英語で話されている映画の内容を理解するのに十分な能力を身に着けることが英語を学習する具体的な目標です。
Ikumi-Mai823
Thank you for your correction!
Jul 28, 2012 11:17
  • From now on,I start to write diary with English.

  • From now on,I start to write diary with English.

    There are multiple ways you could write this sentence, but for now I will use this example:
    "From now on, I will start to write a diary in English"
    "Will" means in the future, what you are going to do.
    "With" is accompanied by. You are "with" John. I would like my apartment "with" a fan.

 
  • I really love a Hollywood movie,so to acquire an ability enough to understand movie in English is the concrete aim of studying English.

  • I really love a Hollywood movie,so to acquire an ability enough to understand movie in English is the concrete aim of studying English.

    "movie" should be "movies" as you are talking about more than one. You don't need "a" before Hollywood because you are talking about a whole genre of movies. "A" is singular, if you were talking about "A Hollywood Movie" you should add the name so the topic of the sentence is more clear.

 

I don't know if that really helped, but contact me if you have any questions

Jul 28, 2012 21:38 yoshi
Thank you for correction.I wish your dream will be come true.
Exis Night
Thank you for your correction!
Jul 28, 2012 11:17
  • From now on,I start to write diary with English.

  • From now on, I will be writing daily English journal entries.

    yoshiさんが男性のなら「journal」の方がよいです。逆に女性のなら、「diary」の方がよいのです。

 
  • Because I want to be an English speaker which can live in America without an interpreter.

  • My goal is to become an English speaker who can live in America without an interpreter.

 
  • And sometime,I plan to go to the United States to study computer science.

  • Also, I plan to go to the United States to study computer science.

    Comp Sci is for code monkeys. Be cool like me and go into networking instead. =D

 
  • I really love a Hollywood movie,so to acquire an ability enough to understand movie in English is the concrete aim of studying English.

  • I really love a Hollywood movies; To be able to watch them without subtitles is one of my concrete goals.

 

I wish you luck in your studies. Take care!

Jul 28, 2012 21:31 yoshi
添削していただきありがとうございます。日記を見させていただきましたが日本語がお上手ですね。お互い頑張りましょう。
あと書き忘れかもしれませんが、添削していただいた日本語の「男性のなら」「女性のなら」という部分は「男性の方なら」「女性の方なら」とすると良いです。
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