my letter.

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how are you J,
i'm glad for receive your reply.
excuse me ,it's better you don't write me chinese'tone,because chinese is my mother

tongue,only chinese character or pinyin will be ok for me.
your pinyin is pretty,only a word was lost.(你没有写给我[过guo]).
i look forwared to hear from you continuing this way soon.
God bless you always
Tan
Dec 29th 2010 17:39 Nymei

  • how are you J,
  • How are you J? (Remember to add punctuation and watch out for run-on sentences by making your sentences shorter.)

 

  • i'm glad for receive your reply.
  • I'm glad for to receive your reply. (Using "for" would be equal to using "because" in that place, which is incorrect grammatically. Instead, it is common to use the infinitive which is "to + verb" in those phrase types. Does that make sense?)

 

  • excuse me ,it's better you don't write me chinese'tone,because chinese is my mother
  • Excuse me *but, it's better you don't write **to me in chinese' tone, because chinese is my mother*When using the phrase "Excuse me", you can either end the sentence there and start a new one, or in this case if when you are correcting someone, you use "but" after it and continue the sentence.**You need to add a preposition (in, out, up, down, to, from, etc) between verbs and indirect objects. Indirect objects are nouns that are related to the verb but the verb doesn't directly affect it. You are writing the letter, not yourself.

 

  • tongue,only chinese character or pinyin will be ok for me.
  • tongue. Only chinese character or pinyin will be ok for me.

 

  • your pinyin is pretty,only a word was lost.(你没有写给我[过guo]).
  • Your pinyin is pretty. Only a one word was lost **missing.(你没有写给我[过guo]). (Remember to capitalize the first word of each sentence. Also, try to keep your sentences short to avoid run-on sentences. Use the sentence formula "Subject+Verb+(Adjective)+Noun" often.) ** In this case, the word "lost" is inappropriate because "lost" means that something that was there before is now gone. "Missing" means that it isn't there or can't be seen.

 

  • i look forwared to hear from you continuing this way soon.
  • I look forward to hearing from you. continuing this way soon. (You don't need to add this part.)

 
I like the way you ended your letter. It's so sweet. I hope my corrections help. Please feel free to ask me to rephrase something or add details. I hope to see more of your writing. I noticed that you haven't been writing much lately. It's good to write often to improve faster.
Yours truly,
Emily

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