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My boyfriend recommended me to write something in English and told me this site is good, so I'm writing this diary.
I came back to chicago a week ago. Time past freaking fast !
That past week was so nice. My boyfriend and I went to lots of places. He usually likes staying in his house but I like go out so it was kind of amazing for me. That's why he's totally exhausted today... There is a beach near our apt. Even though it is Lake Michigan, but it's called a beach here. We went to there three straight days. It was so hot I got awful sun burn on my calves that is so painful still now. My boyfriend got a good tan, he's okey but he looks like a person who is from another country. We also enjoyed beach barbecuing with my friends on the third day. We got a new grill but it was a defective one, it worked though. Anyway, the taste was nice!
Well, after that we went to Japanese sushi restaurant because that day was our friend's birthday. It was also good. Then we went to a party that hold a guy who is my boyfriend's friend. We stayed there for a shot time because the taste of beer was bad. That's kidding. Just because we were so sleepy. Ah! on the way home we saw fire works by chance. Someone did it on the roof top.
I want to write some more but this is getting longer, so I 'll quit to write but I'm going to try to write very soon.
Now I'm waiting for my boy friend's back home. He went to his private teacher's house which is close to here to study English. He and I decided to speak English in daily conversation to improve our English speaking skill. For third person, it might looks like sort of funny or stupid, but we both are serious. Sometimes my speaking makes him annoyed, I feel sorry. I have to study hard for us.
Jul 02nd 2009 05:44 Blackshark

  • My boyfriend recommended me to write something in English and told me this site is good, so I'm writing this diary.
  • My boyfriend recommended me to that I write something in English and told me this site is good, so I'm writing this diary.

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  • I came back to chicago a week ago.
  • I came back returned to chicago a week ago.

 

  • Time past freaking fast !
  • Time passes freaking fast !

1 people think this correction is good.  

  • My boyfriend and I went to lots of places.
  • My boyfriend and I went to alots of places.

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  • Even though it is Lake Michigan, but it's called a beach here.
  • Even though it is Lake Michigan, but it's called a beach here.

 

  • We went to there three straight days.
  • We went to there three straight days. (Or you can also say "three days in a row")

 

  • It was so hot I got awful sun burn on my calves that is so painful still now.
  • It was so hot I got awful sun burn on my calves that is so painful still even now. (or you can say "that is still painful.")

 

  • My boyfriend got a good tan, he's okey but he looks like a person who is from another country.
  • My boyfriend got a good tan, he's okay but he looks like a person who is from another country.

 

  • Then we went to a party that hold a guy who is my boyfriend's friend.
  • Then we went to a party that hold was held by a guy who is my boyfriend's friend. (Or you can say, "We went to a party that was thrown by my boyfriend's friend.")

 

  • We stayed there for a shot time because the taste of beer was bad.
  • We stayed there for a short time because the taste of beer was bad. (Or you can say, "We only stayed a little while because the beer was bad.")

 

  • That's kidding.
  • That's Just kidding. (Or you can say, "I was only kidding.")

 

  • Just because we were so sleepy.
  • Just It was because we were so sleepy.

 

  • on the way home we saw fire works by chance.
  • on the way home we saw happened to see fireworks by chance.

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  • Someone did it on the roof top.
  • Someone did it lit them on from the roof top.

 

  • I want to write some more but this is getting longer, so I 'll quit to write but I'm going to try to write very soon.
  • I want to write some more but this is getting longer, so I'll quit to write stop writing now but I'm going to try to write again very soon.

 

  • Now I'm waiting for my boy friend's back home.
  • Now I'm waiting for my boyfriend's to come back home. (Or you can say, "to return home")

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  • He went to his private teacher's house which is close to here to study English.
  • He went to his private teacher's house, which is close to here, to study English.

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  • For third person, it might looks like sort of funny or stupid, but we both are serious.
  • For third person, it might looks like sort of funny or stupid, but we both are serious.

 

  • Sometimes my speaking makes him annoyed, I feel sorry.
  • Sometimes my speaking makes him annoyed annoys him, I feel sorry badly.

 
I think your English is very, very good! Please continue to write diary posts. I think you will become better and better at it. Speaking English is the best way to learn. Do not worry about how you sound. Just keep practicing. *smile* Please ask me any time for help. I will be happy to help you.
Jul 02nd 2009 05:52 Fred Duck

  • my 1st diary
  • My 1st entry

 

  • I came back to chicago a week ago.
  • I got back to Chicago a week ago.

 

  • Time past freaking fast !
  • Time passed freaking fast!

 

  • That past week was so nice.
  • This past week has been so nice.

 

  • My boyfriend and I went to lots of places.
  • My boyfriend and I went to lots of places.

 

  • He usually likes staying in his house but I like go out so it was kind of amazing for me.
  • He usually likes staying in the house but I like going out, so it was kind of amazing for me.

 

  • Even though it is Lake Michigan, but it's called a beach here.
  • Even though it is Lake Michigan, it's still called a beach here.

 

  • We went to there three straight days.
  • We went there three days in a row.

 

  • It was so hot I got awful sun burn on my calves that is so painful still now.
  • It was so hot I got an awful sunburn on my calves that is still so painful.

 

  • My boyfriend got a good tan, he's okey but he looks like a person who is from another country.
  • My boyfriend got a good tan. He feels fine but now he looks like he's from another country.

 

  • We also enjoyed beach barbecuing with my friends on the third day.
  • We also went barbecuing on the beach with my friends on the third day.

 

  • We got a new grill but it was a defective one, it worked though.
  • We got a new grill. It was defective, but it still kind of worked.

 

  • Anyway, the taste was nice!
  • Anyway, the food tasted nice!

 

  • Well, after that we went to Japanese sushi restaurant because that day was our friend's birthday.
  • Well, after that we went to a Japanese sushi restaurant because it was our friend's birthday.

 

  • Then we went to a party that hold a guy who is my boyfriend's friend.
  • Then we went to this guy's party, who's my boyfriend's friend.

 

  • We stayed there for a shot time because the taste of beer was bad.
  • We only stayed a short time because the beer was terrible.

 

  • That's kidding.
  • Just kidding.

 

  • Just because we were so sleepy.
  • Actually, we were really tired.

 

  • on the way home we saw fire works by chance.
  • On our way home, we happened to see some fireworks.

 

  • Someone did it on the roof top.
  • Someone was setting them off from a rooftop.

 

  • I want to write some more but this is getting longer, so I 'll quit to write but I'm going to try to write very soon.
  • I want to write some more but this is getting kind of long, so I'll quit for now but I'm going to try to write again very soon.

 

  • Now I'm waiting for my boy friend's back home.
  • Now, I'm waiting for my boyfriend to get back home.

 

  • He went to his private teacher's house which is close to here to study English.
  • He went to his private tutor's house, which is close to here, to study English.

 

  • He and I decided to speak English in daily conversation to improve our English speaking skill.
  • We decided to speak English together as much as possible to improve our speaking skills.

 

  • For third person, it might looks like sort of funny or stupid, but we both are serious.
  • If someone else saw us, it might look sort of funny or stupid, but we are both serious.

 

  • Sometimes my speaking makes him annoyed, I feel sorry.
  • Sometimes my speaking annoys him and I feel bad.

 
"his house" -> "the house" because you live together, right?

When using "even though," we often balance it with "still" on the other side.
eg, "Even though I said I wasn't going to drive, I still ended up driving somehow."

Three straight days is 72 hours. :P

"So painful" can also be "really painful," "very painful," or even "super painful."

"He feels fine but now he looks like he's from another country." or "He feels fine but now he looks like someone from another country.

"Enjoy" is a pretty formal verb.

I'm very surprised there's a good sushi restaurant in Chicago. ^_^; (I live in the suburbs.) It must've been very expensive! Do you ever go to Mitsuwa?

If you want to be more casual, instead of "We only stayed a short time because the beer was terrible," you can say "We only stayed a short time because the beer sucked." :}

I don't hear many people say that they're sleepy, but rather that they're tired. "Beat" = "tired."

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