I got on a train

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There was crowded on the train when I got them. I should got on next train but I got on them. I don't like a crowded train. All of the women don't like them. Today was a hot day so it was hot on the train when I got on them.

I got on a train about 10 minutes but I thought I got on a train for a long time. There are so many staitions in Tokyo and they have a few train so it will become crowd in the morning or evening.
Jul 09th 2009 11:45

  • There was crowded on the train when I got them.
  • The train was crowded when I got on it.

 

  • I should got on next train but I got on them.
  • I should have got on the next train, but I didn't.

 

  • All of the women don't like them.
  • Women don't like them either.

 

  • Today was a hot day so it was hot on the train when I got on them.
  • Today was a hot day so it was hot on the train when I got on it.

 

  • There are so many staitions in Tokyo and they have a few train so it will become crowd in the morning or evening.
  • There are so many staitions in Tokyo and they have a few trains so it will become crowded in the morning or evening.

 
Great job, my corrections are just to make it sound more natural and minor changes.
Keep it up.
Jul 09th 2009 11:50 Tintin

  • There was crowded on the train when I got them.
  • There It was crowded on the train when I got them there.

 

  • I should got on next train but I got on them.
  • I should have gotten on the next train, but I got on them then.

 

  • I don't like a crowded train.
  • I don't like a crowded trains.

 

  • Today was a hot day so it was hot on the train when I got on them.
  • Today was a hot day, so it was hot on the train when I got on them.

 

  • I got on a train about 10 minutes but I thought I got on a train for a long time.
  • I got was on a the train for about 10 minutes, but I thought I got on a train for a it was a long time.

 

  • There are so many staitions in Tokyo and they have a few train so it will become crowd in the morning or evening.
  • There are so many stations in Tokyo, but they have a few trains, so it will becomes crowded in the morning or evening.

 
I heard it's very crowded too.
I still want to visit Tokyo sometime though.

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