Trekking: as healthy as dangerous

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Hi!!
Once again, I had to write an article for my English class. It was about “How to be safe if you go walking in the country or the mountains”. I’m posting it here hoping that you could correct my mistakes. Thanks for everything!!

-- Trekking: as healthy as dangerous --

Ups, I didn’t know that…
How to prevent and face some of the common risks of doing trekking

If you love being outdoors, or going for a walk through forests or in the mountains, or just walking for a long time, then trekking is ideal for you.
This is good for health because it involves both physical and mental work.
Trekking isn’t a relaxing activity; it has his risks. If you’re thinking of doing it, you must take care of several things… for example; do you know what to do if a bad-tempered dog appears in front of you? Or if a storm starts? Or if you get injured?
Obviously you can’t always prevent these incidents, but at least you can learn how to survive to them. So, here you have some advices and tips that may be useful for you:

[A bad-tempered dog]
If a dog comes to you barking and grunting, don't run away: the animal may run after you. Don’t use your arms to defend yourself; the dog could see it as an aggression. Just try to move away slowly, to avoid a possible attack.
Anyway, if the animal attacks you, just try to give him something to bite, like a branch, a hat or a bottle of water; anything unless your body.

[Blisters]
I you get a blister on your foot, stop walking and find the reason of the irritation. If it’s caused for some fold of the sock or loose shoe, try to correct it. If the slight pain continues, take off the other sock or use a handkerchief as an additional protection. This way, you’ll be able to go on. But when you have finished the exercise, clean the affected area and put some cream and bandage on it.
It is very important to use some good footwear to avoid this problem.

[An electric storm]
If you get stuck in a storm, the best you can do is to look for an open space and to bend down nearest to the ground as it’s possible. Stay away from trees and metal materials which conduct electricity.
If suddenly your hair stand on end and you taste like copper, it means a ray is going to strike nearly. In that case, you should put your feet and legs together and cover your ears with your hands. Try to stay down, squatting on your toetip. You must never lie down on the floor, because you might get an electric shock if a ray hits around.

[A stab of pain on the abdomen]
If this happens to you, slow down the walking or stop it completely and put your arm up. With your arm extended, stretch your body to the opposite side of the pain.
To prevent this pain, you should keep a diet based on easily digestible foods like bread or bananas, and sport drinks, especially before the walking. And it’s essential to keep hydrated during the whole exercise.

[Sunburn]
Spending much time under the sun could be health hazard for you if you don’t take the necessary cares. One of the measures to be taken is to wear a hat to reduce the risk of getting sunburned or heat exhaustion. You should also put some sun block cream on your face and every part of your body exposed to the sunlight.

[A twisted ankle]
Try to walk slowly and then increase the speed of the walking to check the importance of the lesion. If you can walk quickly without feeling any pain, just come back your home. If your ankle is swollen, take your sock down to check if there are bones out of place. However keep your sock and shoe put, because the compression helps to avoid the swelling.
Once you arrived home, put some ice on your ankle and keep it raised. If the pain continues, call a doctor.


Making a list of the things to carry on with you could save you of being in troubles.
Insect repellent, a first-aid box, a map, a compass, a knife, a flashlight, some food rich in carbohydrates, water, an extra pair of sock, a raincoat or windbreaker, a hat and gloves are some of the items you must take note. And always remember to try to leave some mark on those places where you could possibly get lost.
Finally, after taking all these things in consideration, it only rests you to spend an entertaining experience, breathing fresh air and enjoying the beauties of our mother nature.
Oct 16th 2010 13:19 ltsiros

  • It was about “How to be safe if you go walking in the country or the mountains”.
  • It is about “How to be safe if you go walking in the countryside or the mountains”. (not sure if this is a mistake)

 

  • Ups, I didn’t know that…
  • Oops, I didn’t know that… (Does this sentence really belong here?)

 

  • This is good for health because it involves both physical and mental work.
  • It is good for health because it involves both physical and mental work.

 

  • Trekking isn’t a relaxing activity; it has his risks.
  • However, trekking isn’t a relaxing activity; it has its risks.

 

  • So, here you have some advices and tips that may be useful for you:
  • So, here you have some advices and tips that may be useful for you: (advice is uncountable)

 

  • Anyway, if the animal attacks you, just try to give him something to bite, like a branch, a hat or a bottle of water; anything unless your body.
  • Anyway, if the animal attacks you, just try to give it something to bite, like a branch, a hat or a bottle of water; anything but your body.

 

  • I you get a blister on your foot, stop walking and find the reason of the irritation.
  • I you get a blister on your feet, stop walking and find the reason of the irritation.

 

  • If it’s caused for some fold of the sock or loose shoe, try to correct it.
  • If it’s caused by some fold of the sock or loose shoe, try to correct it.

 

  • If the slight pain continues, take off the other sock or use a handkerchief as an additional protection.
  • If the slight pain continues, take off the other sock or use a handkerchief as an additional protection.

 

  • It is very important to use some good footwear to avoid this problem.
  • It is very important to use some good footwear to avoid this problem.

 

  • If you get stuck in a storm, the best you can do is to look for an open space and to bend down nearest to the ground as it’s possible.
  • If you get stuck in a storm, the best you can do is to look for an open space and to bend down as nearest to the ground as it’s possible.

 

  • If suddenly your hair stand on end and you taste like copper, it means a ray is going to strike nearly.
  • If suddenly your hair stands on end and you taste like copper, it means a thunderbolt is going to strike nearly.

 

  • Try to stay down, squatting on your toetip.
  • Try to stay down, squatting on your toetips.

 

  • You must never lie down on the floor, because you might get an electric shock if a ray hits around.
  • You must never lie down on the floor, because you might get an electric shock if a thunderbolt hits around.

 

  • [A stab of pain on the abdomen]
  • [A stabbing of pain on the abdomen]

 

  • If this happens to you, slow down the walking or stop it completely and put your arm up.
  • If this happens to you, slow down the walking or stop it completely and put your arms up.

 

  • With your arm extended, stretch your body to the opposite side of the pain.
  • With your arms extended, stretch your body to the opposite side of the pain.

 

  • To prevent this pain, you should keep a diet based on easily digestible foods like bread or bananas, and sport drinks, especially before the walking.
  • To prevent this pain, you should keep a diet based on easily digestible foods like bread or bananas, and sports drinks, especially before the walking.

 

  • And it’s essential to keep hydrated during the whole exercise.
  • And it’s essential to keep yourself hydrated during the whole exercise.

 

  • Spending much time under the sun could be health hazard for you if you don’t take the necessary cares.
  • Spending much time under the sun could be a health hazard for you if you don’t take the necessary cares.

 

  • You should also put some sun block cream on your face and every part of your body exposed to the sunlight.
  • You should also put some sun block cream on your face and every part of your body exposed to the sunlight.

 

  • Try to walk slowly and then increase the speed of the walking to check the importance of the lesion.
  • Try to walk slowly and then increase the speed of the walking to check the importance of the lesion. (injury sounds more natural)

 

  • If you can walk quickly without feeling any pain, just come back your home.
  • If you can walk quickly without feeling any pain, just go back your home.

 

  • Once you arrived home, put some ice on your ankle and keep it raised.
  • Once you arrived home, put some ice on your ankle and keep it raised.

 

  • Making a list of the things to carry on with you could save you of being in troubles.
  • Making a list of the things to carry on with you could save you from being in troubles.

 

  • Insect repellent, a first-aid box, a map, a compass, a knife, a flashlight, some food rich in carbohydrates, water, an extra pair of sock, a raincoat or windbreaker, a hat and gloves are some of the items you must take note.
  • Insect repellent, a first-aid box, a map, a compass, a knife, a flashlight, some food rich in carbohydrates, water, an extra pair of socks, a raincoat or windbreaker, a hat and gloves are some of the items you must take note of.

 

  • Finally, after taking all these things in consideration, it only rests you to spend an entertaining experience, breathing fresh air and enjoying the beauties of our mother nature.
  • Finally, after taking all these things in consideration, it only rests you what's left is to spend enjoy an entertaining experience, breathing fresh air and watching the beauties of our mother nature. (To avoid repeating "enjoy")

 
I am not a native English speaker, but hope this helps! Make sure to review countable vs uncountable nouns! :)
Mar 01st 2011 19:07 Crafedog

  • Trekking: as healthy as dangerous
  • Trekking: as healthy as it is dangerous

 

  • It was about “How to be safe if you go walking in the country or the mountains”.
  • It was about “How to be safe when you go walking in the country or the mountains”. - "how to be safe" could also be "how to take care"

 

  • I’m posting it here hoping that you could correct my mistakes.
  • I’m posting it here hoping that you could correct my mistakes. - that's ok but "...here in the hope that..." sounds slightly better

 

  • -- Trekking: as healthy as dangerous --
  • -- Trekking: as healthy as it is dangerous --

 

  • How to prevent and face some of the common risks of doing trekking
  • How to prevent and face some of the common risks of doing trekking - face is okay but "respond to" is also ok. "while trekking" might be good as well

 

  • If you love being outdoors, or going for a walk through forests or in the mountains, or just walking for a long time, then trekking is ideal for you.
  • If you love being outdoors, going for a walk through forests or the mountains or just walking for a long time, then trekking is ideal for you.

 

  • This is good for health because it involves both physical and mental work.
  • It's good for your health because it involves both physical and mental work. - "work" is an okay word but "exercise" might be better because "work" is a bit more of a negative word

 

  • If you’re thinking of doing it, you must take care of several things… for example; do you know what to do if a bad-tempered dog appears in front of you?
  • If you’re thinking of doing it, you must take care of several things… for example; do you know what to do if you encounter a bad-tempered dog? - more natural

 

  • Obviously you can’t always prevent these incidents, but at least you can learn how to survive to them.
  • Obviously you can’t always prevent these kinds of things from happening, but at least you can learn how to survive them (get through them). - just more natural choices

 

  • So, here you have some advices and tips that may be useful for you:
  • So, here is some advice and some tips that may be useful for you:

 

  • If a dog comes to you barking and grunting, don't run away: the animal may run after you.
  • If a dog comes barking and growling at you, don't run away: the animal may run after you. - "grunt" is an unusual word. It's more like a noise a human makes when he's annoyed or been hit.

 

  • Don’t use your arms to defend yourself; the dog could see it as an aggression.
  • Don’t use your arms to defend yourself; the dog could see it as an act of aggression.

 

  • Just try to move away slowly, to avoid a possible attack.
  • Just try to move away slowly to avoid a possible attack. - or maybe "to avoid angering it"

 

  • Anyway, if the animal attacks you, just try to give him something to bite, like a branch, a hat or a bottle of water; anything unless your body.
  • Anyway, if the animal attacks you, just try to give him something to bite, like a branch, a hat or a bottle of water; anything except your body.

 

  • I you get a blister on your foot, stop walking and find the reason of the irritation.
  • If you get a blister on your foot, stop walking (take off your shoes) and find the cause of it.

 

  • If it’s caused for some fold of the sock or loose shoe, try to correct it.
  • If it’s being caused by the sock or because your shoe is loose, try to fix it.

 

  • If the slight pain continues, take off the other sock or use a handkerchief as an additional protection.
  • If the slight pain continues, take off the other sock or use a handkerchief for additional protection. - maybe instead of "slight pain" you could use "irritation"

 

  • This way, you’ll be able to go on.
  • This way, you’ll be able to go on. - or "able to continue with your journey"

 

  • But when you have finished the exercise, clean the affected area and put some cream and bandage on it.
  • But when you have finished the exercise, clean the affected area and put some cream and a bandage on it.

 

  • If suddenly your hair stand on end and you taste like copper, it means a ray is going to strike nearly.
  • If, suddenly, your hair stands on end and you taste copper, it means a lightning is going to strike any second.

 

  • Try to stay down, squatting on your toetip.
  • Try to stay down, squatting on your toetip the tips of your toes.

 

  • You must never lie down on the floor, because you might get an electric shock if a ray hits around.
  • You must never lie down on the floor, because you might get an electric shock if lightning strikes near you.

 

  • [A stab of pain on the abdomen]
  • [A stabbing pain in the abdomen] - "stomach" is a more common word but it's no big deal.

 

  • If this happens to you, slow down the walking or stop it completely and put your arm up.
  • If this happens to you, walk slower or stop it completely and put your arm up in the air.

 

  • With your arm extended, stretch your body to the opposite side of the pain.
  • With your arm extended, stretch your body, opposite to the area of pain. - tricky sentence

 

  • To prevent this pain, you should keep a diet based on easily digestible foods like bread or bananas, and sport drinks, especially before the walking.
  • To prevent this pain, you should keep try to maintain a diet based on of easily digestible foods like bread or bananas and consume sports drinks, especially before the walking.

 

  • Spending much time under the sun could be health hazard for you if you don’t take the necessary cares.
  • Spending too much/a lot of time under the sun can be a health hazard for you if you don’t take the necessary cares precautions.

 

  • One of the measures to be taken is to wear a hat to reduce the risk of getting sunburned or heat exhaustion.
  • One thing you can do [more natural] is to wear a hat to reduce the risk of getting sunburned or suffering from heat exhaustion.

 

  • You should also put some sun block cream on your face and every part of your body exposed to the sunlight.
  • You should also put some sunblock or sun tan lotion on your face and every part of your body exposed to the sunlight.

 

  • Try to walk slowly and then increase the speed of the walking to check the importance of the lesion.
  • Try to walk slowly and then increase the your walking speed of the walking to check the importance extent of the lesion injury.

 

  • If you can walk quickly without feeling any pain, just come back your home.
  • If you can walk quickly without feeling any pain, just come back your home.

 

  • If your ankle is swollen, take your sock down to check if there are bones out of place.
  • If your ankle is swollen, roll down your sock down to check if there are any bones out of place.

 

  • However keep your sock and shoe put, because the compression helps to avoid the swelling.
  • However keep your sock and shoe put on, because the compression pressure helps to avoid the swelling.

 

  • Once you arrived home, put some ice on your ankle and keep it raised.
  • Once you arrive home, put some ice on your ankle and keep it in a raised position.

 

  • Making a list of the things to carry on with you could save you of being in troubles.
  • Making a list of the things to carry on with you could save you of from being in trouble.

 

  • Insect repellent, a first-aid box, a map, a compass, a knife, a flashlight, some food rich in carbohydrates, water, an extra pair of sock, a raincoat or windbreaker, a hat and gloves are some of the items you must take note.
  • Insect repellent, a first-aid box, a map, a compass, a knife, a flashlight, some food rich in carbohydrates, water, an extra pair of socks, a raincoat or windbreaker, a hat and some gloves are some of the items you must take note of. - first aid kit is also quite a common word

 

  • And always remember to try to leave some mark on those places where you could possibly get lost.
  • And always remember to try to leave some mark on those places where you could possibly might get lost. - might is a bit more natural

 

  • Finally, after taking all these things in consideration, it only rests you to spend an entertaining experience, breathing fresh air and enjoying the beauties of our mother nature.
  • Finally, after taking all these things into consideration, make sure to have a good time it only rests you to spend an entertaining experience, breathing the fresh air and enjoying mother nature's beauty.

 
Some tricky things there but you did well. If you need to write something like this in future, search the internet for something like "safety guidelines" or "what to do in a..." and take note of the language used.
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