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I've just transferred to other elementary school after my third careers as a teacher.

It's just passed two days since my new life started,

but now I am very exhausted!

For sure, I'm not still accustmed to be in new environment-relationship among coworkers, allocation of goods, all of the system.

I have to be in charge of the jobs much tougher than before.

I need to do my best in my work, but at the same time, I would like to do my best in utilizing my private time freely, very well!
Apr 03rd 2010 00:08 cardician

  • I've just transferred to other elementary school after my third careers as a teacher.
  • I've just transferred to another elementary school after my third job as a teacher. (We would say job instead of career. A career is really what you do overall. So your career is that of a teacher. You have had three different jobs teaching though, within your career. Hope that makes sense.)

 

  • It's just passed two days since my new life started,
  • Just two days have passed since my new life started,

 

  • but now I am very exhausted!
  • Now I am very exhausted! (Just a note that in English we don't start sentences with But or And)

 

  • For sure, I'm not still accustmed to be in new environment-relationship among coworkers, allocation of goods, all of the system.
  • For sure, I'm still not accustomed to be in a new environment-relationship among coworkers, allocation of goods, the whole system. (While it works, "For sure" is not really a good way to start a sentence. It would be better to say something like, "I'm definitely still not accustomed")

 

  • I have to be in charge of the jobs much tougher than before.
  • I am in charge of jobs that are much tougher than before.

 

  • I need to do my best in my work, but at the same time, I would like to do my best in utilizing my private time freely, very well!
  • I need to do my best in my work, but at the same time, I would like to do my best in utilizing my private time freely, very well! (very well at the end is redundant ant not necessary. This sentence works but doesn't flow quite like regular English. Perhaps another way to say it would be, "I want to do my best at my job, but at the same time, I would like to enjoy my private time as much as possible")

 
Overall, your English is very nice. Good job. I hope my corrections help a bit.
Apr 04th 2010 09:31 naranara

>carditian
Thanks for your correction!

Sorry, I've just noticed that I made a mistake at the first sentence.

>>I've just transferred to another elementary school after my third job as a teacher.

It's not "my third job", but "my third years at the same elemantary school".

So,"I've just transferred to another elementary school after my third years at the same elementary school."

Does it make sence?

Apr 04th 2010 10:41 cardician

Yeah, the sentence makes a lot more sense after your correction. Your new sentence is perfect I'd say. Nice job.

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