Pursuing a dream!

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When i was a child, I began to have two indulgences: Art and Architecture. I inherited them from my mother and my cousin. Till now, I has pursued them for 11 years. Despite the long time, My passion does not fade. I try my best to look for good architect and find information from them. I get ahead into some prọjects related to construction at my school. Apart from that, I sometimes go to famous artists' exhibition in Vietnam. The result is that i achieve the gold award in the 34th children's art exhibition.However, it is still not my aim. The path to my dream is still long and I have a lot of difficulties. Although my English is not very good now, I want to go to Yale to study Architecture. Please help me to improve it and i can shorten distance to my dream.
Thank you for reading!
Nov 21st 2009 14:22 Roomy

  • Despite the long time, My passion does not fade.
  • Despite the longlength of time, Mmy passion doeshas not faded away.

 

  • I try my best to look for good architect and find information from them.
  • I'll try my best to look forbecome a good architect and find information from them.

 

  • Apart from that, I sometimes go to famous artists' exhibition in Vietnam.
  • Apart from that, I sometimes go to the famous artists' exhibition in Vietnam.

 

  • The result is that i achieve the gold award in the 34th children's art exhibition.
  • The result is that iI achieve the gold award in the 34th children's art exhibition.

 

  • Please help me to improve it and i can shorten distance to my dream.
  • Please help me to improve it and i so that I can shorten the distance to my dream.

 
Your English is much better than mine ;)
Nov 21st 2009 14:37 pipnguyen

Thanks!
Nov 21st 2009 14:44 pipnguyen

In the second correction, I think you misunderstand my idea. Anyway, I have a mistake in that sentence: it has to be "architects".
Nov 21st 2009 15:29 Meiji320

the skyle of writing is very excellent ! try to do your best. There're a will,there's way,you know! i belive that ur dream will come true soon .
Nov 21st 2009 16:11 ender_555

  • When i was a child, I began to have two indulgences: Art and Architecture.
  • When i was a child, I began to form an interest in art and architecture.Ever since I was a child, I have always been very interested in art and architecture. (doc hay hon cau truoc)

 

  • I inherited them from my mother and my cousin.
  • I inherited them from my mother and my cousin. Inherit from cousin?? -> sao duoc? I think it runs in the family, because my mother and my cousin have similar passions.

 

  • Till now, I has pursued them for 11 years.
  • Until now, I have pursued studies in art and architecture for 11 years.

 

  • Despite the long time, My passion does not fade.
  • Despite studying for such a long time, my passion has not faded.

 

  • I try my best to look for good architect and find information from them.
  • I try my best to look for good architects and ask them many questions.

 

  • I get ahead into some prọjects related to construction at my school.
  • I helped with some prọjects related to construction at my school. (co nghia la ba.n guip' trong cuoc xay du.ng cua truong` ko?)

 

  • Apart from that, I sometimes go to famous artists' exhibition in Vietnam.
  • Apart from that, I sometimes participate in famous artists' exhibitions in Vietnam.

 

  • The result is that i achieve the gold award in the 34th children's art exhibition.
  • The result is that i earned the gold award in the 34th children's art exhibition.

 

  • However, it is still not my aim.
  • However, was not not my main goal.

 

  • Although my English is not very good now, I want to go to Yale to study Architecture.
  • Although my English is not very good now yet, I want to go to Yale to study Architecture.

 

  • Please help me to improve it and i can shorten distance to my dream.
  • Please help me to improve it, so i can shorten the distance to my dream.

 
Wow, great dream, I hope that you can fulfill it !
Nov 22nd 2009 00:31 pipnguyen

Thank for your corrections and comments.

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