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Jul 04th 2011 17:38
It's been 2 days since I met you, my brain is full of you.

It is not so far that I cannot reach. But I've never tried to touch you.

Because if I touch you I think everything I've established gonna collapse.

That fear alienate you.

If I've got on you in my birthday suit,

on top of you like the hands on the clock telling midnight,

with holding by you until the moon sets over the sea, and share the panorama of the color of the sky,

I would've not feeling this gloom.

How many times will I have sleepless nights?

I cannot concentrate on anything but I'm just more in love with you.

Ah,

dear my new bed.





Meri J.
Thank you for your correction!
Jul 04th 2011 18:29
  • Because if I touch you I think everything I've established gonna collapse.

  • Because if I touch you I think everything I've established is gonna collapse.

 
  • That fear alienate you.

  • That fear could alienate you.

 
  • If I've got on you in my birthday suit,

  • If I had got on you in my birthday suit,

 
  • with holding by you until the moon sets over the sea, and share the panorama of the color of the sky,

  • being held by you until the moon set over the sea, and shared the panorama of the color of the sky,

 
  • I would've not feeling this gloom.

  • I would've not be feeling this gloom.

 
  • dear my new bed.

  • my dear new bed.

 
^^ You love your bed? Cute!
Great English writing.
Jul 05th 2011 13:45 Kosei
I love my new bed♪ But this weekend I had so much stuff to do. So I stayed all night at the lab...

Thank you for your correction!♪
lx
Thank you for your correction!
Jul 04th 2011 19:12
  • It's been 2 days since I met you, my brain is full of you.

  • It's been 2 days since I met you, my brain is full of you.

 
bahahahaha nice use of the word birthday suit. I liked the twist at the end ;-)
Jul 05th 2011 13:47 Kosei
Thank you for your correction!　I'm glad that you liked it♪
Thank you for your correction!
Jul 04th 2011 21:30
  • If I've got on you in my birthday suit,

  • If I had got onto you in my birthday suit,

 
  • How many times will I have sleepless nights?

  • (Oh) How many times will I have more sleepless nights will I have?

 
  • I cannot concentrate on anything but I'm just more in love with you.

  • I cannot concentrate on anything else; but I'm just so in love with you.

 
I laughed out loud! Ingenious post, and I like this especially:

"If I've got on you in my birthday suit,
on top of you like the hands on the clock telling midnight,
with holding by you until the moon sets over the sea, and share the panorama of the color of the sky..."


Erotic, romantic, and slightly poetic. :)
Jul 05th 2011 13:42 Kosei
Thank you 名無しさん(*^_^*)☆

I'm glad you like this♪

Yeah, that part makes this more serious. But this is a poem for my bed! LOL
Aurie
Jul 04th 2011 23:10
hehhehe I like your poem ^_^
Jul 05th 2011 13:44 Kosei
Thank you, Aurie♪ I'm glad you like this☆
P.
Aug 04th 2011 21:52
OMG! It's so hilarious! ;) This poem made my day! Thanks! ;)
Aug 05th 2011 00:44 Kosei
Haha(*^_^*)☆　I'm glad that I made your day♪　LOL
Sep 01st 2011 15:52
Hahaha so cute! At first I was like "wow lucky girl" then I read the part about your bed, lucky bed :P
Sep 02nd 2011 12:00 Kosei
Haha♪　I'm still in love with her(´∀｀)☆
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