Japan was covered with a lot of snow

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Almost all Japan was covered with a heavy body of cold air from last week. And the temperature in all Japan was getting low. Besides it was snowing in Hokuriku and Tohoku areas. The quantity of snow is about two times as usually years. So a lot of accidents happened in the snow areas. About 50 people and more passed away because of the accidents of snow. According to the weather information, the cold weather continued until this weekend. I take care not to have a cold, I think.
Feb 02nd 2012 13:10 Anne

  • And the temperature in all Japan was getting low.
  • And The temperature in all Japan was getting low.

 

  • Besides it was snowing in Hokuriku and Tohoku areas.
  • Besides It was also snowing in Hokuriku and Tohoku areas.

 

  • The quantity of snow is about two times as usually years.
  • The quantity of snow is about two times as much as usually years.

 

  • So a lot of accidents happened in the snow areas.
  • So, a lot of accidents happened in the snowy areas.

 

  • About 50 people and more passed away because of the accidents of snow.
  • About 50 people and more More than 50 people passed away because of the accidents in the of snow.

 

  • According to the weather information, the cold weather continued until this weekend.
  • According to the weather information, the cold weather continued until this weekend.

 

  • I take care not to have a cold, I think.
  • I should take care not to have a cold, I think.

 
This is well written. Many of your mistakes come from trying to use conjunctions (like and, but, and or) for the beginnings of sentences.
Feb 03rd 2012 07:29 ta-chan
Thank you for your correction. I want to study using conjunctions more.

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